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Hearts fill with longing for what is not theirs-
tempting, enticing like only addicts know.
Desperately pushed to the point of despair,
this fluttery stomach is now their worst foe!
Secrets left screaming upon airtight lips,
they refuse to slip, mustn't endanger
true meaning in those very "subtle" quips
which, try as they might- refuse to waver.
So giving up may seem the only choice
in this defeat. But that would mean to lose
the most precious treasure. They hold their voice
and silence their souls, becoming subdued.
There's pain in each agonizing moment,
but worth it for every shared instant spent.
Breaking a writer's block with conflicting emotions. I don't write many sonnets, I would love feedback :)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Student Writer
Gorgeous poem!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you!
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2012  Student Writer
It was no problem!
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Student Writer
good work, sis!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank-you! finally broke my writer's block. kinda.
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Writer
:thumbsup:
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