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maybe you forgot how to
wake up without screaming.

she smiles like a broken dawn
and the meek will inherit the
earth, if they don't drown,
first. she's barely breathing;
trying to grow gills because
it's only in the state of dying
that we adapt.

and you won't see the colors
pouring out of her chest, you
won't hear the ebbing swansong
she hums so quietly.

you didn't come to be reminded.

you inject a little further, a little
closer to the heart.      numb.

(she died the day she
was given a name)

she made you promise never
to be a number, or a majority;
she made your heart beat in a way
that made you think you were alive,
but you can't believe in anything
that lasts longer than a minute.

you shut down. fingers
close around an empty bottle,
a flaccid tongue writhes
and it tastes bitter.

she's too close, you can hear
her thoughts unwind, you can
taste her mistakes. it's too real.

you were never human, you
tell yourself so you can be
convinced it was never valid.

she's too close and
her eyes are
blue.

numb.
Learning to forget but your eyes are blue, too.
loosely inspired by two Dance Gavin Dance songs

Read by the wonderful *disrhythmic [link]
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acornbaby6 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012   General Artist
This is so beautiful. Stanzas two and seven just wow. Amazing. Just so good ...!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Wise-lies Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is one of your best pieces, i think. i just absolutely have fallen in love with your writing style and this feels like such an honest poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconlainloveplz: thank you so much! you're so lovely.
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Concora Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012   Writer
she smiles like a broken dawn
and the meek will inherit the
earth, if they don't drown,
first.


Oh. Oh I like that.
I like all of this actually, of course. Beautifully haunting. Wonderful work, as always :heart:!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh, thank you so much! you're wonderful :tighthug:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
Hello lovely. <3 I read this out loud and I'd love to put it up on the #Elocutionists blog ([link]). You can listen to my reading here: [link]

Let me know if you like it, yeah? I loved reading it. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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I absolutely love it! :iconepiclaplz:!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
:iconlawooplz: I'm so glad you like it! :heart:

Do I have your permission to post this over at #Elocutionists? :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yes! certainly, yes! :love:
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