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little siren girl, held up by fishhooks
and lines - you'll only be free when
they cut you loose.

still, they tell you: you will not fall
victim to swelling tides, you
will float. (you are a dead weight.)

you are something incomplete
like the forgotten house on the
end of the row, eating itself,
dimming day by day:
paint chips and chapped lips
have nothing left to say.

there are monsters nursing
deep beneath your flesh, with
threadbare spines and trembling
hands, they are afraid of their own
shadows. (you are only weak when
your eyes are open)

a new year waits upon your doorstep,
promising to take all that was ever [you]
away.

the paper doll can finally sleep,
to see another day.
When the sun finally resurrects, you will, too.

(goodbye, 2012 :heart:)
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bloodawni Apr 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello, I wanted to let you know I've used your lovely title in my newest Title Poem, 'your teeth leave different scars'. If you wanted to read it, the link is [link] - but this comment is really just to let you know how I've made use of your gorgeous title. :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
what a beautiful poem, I'm honored to be a part of it :love:
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bloodawni May 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Bless, thank you! :heart:
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TheMoorMaiden Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
there are monsters nursing
deep beneath your flesh, with
threadbare spines and trembling
hands


Guh. How do you do it? Your imagery is just beautiful. :heart: This piece feels like a big breath of fresh air; it feels like a new year. :)
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intricately-ordinary Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What an honor! :tighthug: Thank you!
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TheMoorMaiden Jan 8, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome! :aww:
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Blacksand459 Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I fear that if I completely gush over each of your poems, you'll think me addled or superfluous. B-)

But the more I read your work, the more its like...serendipity defined. That special occurrence when you read a poem or hear a song that you didn't know you were looking for until you found it. That may be a cliché, but nevertheless it is true.

there are monsters nursing
deep beneath your flesh, with
threadbare spines and trembling
hands, they are afraid of their own
shadows.


Well done.
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intricately-ordinary Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's one of the kindest things anyone has ever said about my poetry. I'm absolutely honored it clicks with you in such a way, and thank you so much for making my day! :heart:
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Blacksand459 Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're most welcome. :D I'm glad I made you happy; it was my pleasure.
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iamPoetry Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful words placed nicely so.
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