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when they peel back her skin they
find a feeble layer of stringent
exigency saved up for the people who
would lend her a light on her path
to gossamer fabrications, she's

lost herself in fairytales like
the crumbs that don't lead home
and the girl who needs to sleep off
a few decades before things can
fall into place-

she dug her own grave but
it turned out to be a rabbit hole,
she's sea sick- she lulls
       it's
       a little disarming when the waves reflect
       your mirrored malignance and the
       only way out is
       down
    (her siren song sounds like
     a martyr's last motive)

she sighs and promises herself to a man
who doesn't give a damn
she dances alone, her splintered bones echo
'the story's over'

the end.
We forgot our words, we left them out to dry in the moonlight.
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Sjemenka Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this is sooooo good.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: you're so sweet
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Woah. The last lines gave me chills.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: ohmygosh, thank you so much!
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome. :)
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My dreams have always been vivid (for those that I do remember) and my imagination has always been wild, clear, strong... so imagery is something I find to be supremely relate-able and you never fail to deliver. Your constantly clever use of this, and your old-soul sort of word choice really puts a world of detail into mere lines of poetry :D I love the first stanza the most though the last reminds me, powerfully, of someone tragic I used to know :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My imagination has always been great, too. When I look around, I try to see things in new words. Thank you so much :heart: though I am sorry the last stanza brings up those memories :/
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That much is obvious :love: You are marvelous. And you are, of course, welcome Miss Intricately :worship: And please do not worry or apologize! Before she became tragic, she was quite special and a pleasure to know... no matter how things ended up, I always look to the better memories for the people I once knew ^.^ If anything, you've done me yet another favor, reminding me... :bow: :blowkiss:
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love love love this, your words are just so brilliant and moving!

i loved saved up for the people who/would lend her a light on her path/to gossamer fabrications and i also loved and the girl who needs to sleep off/a few decades before things can/fall into place-

god and this too: she dug her own grave but/it turned out to be a rabbit hole,

your lines are always so....clever.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are too kind to me, I so appreciate the feedback, dear! :iconlainloveplz:
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