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I’m losing all my friends like
it’s an obligation; this is
the witching hour and
I’m alone
with
a trickling down my back,
along my shoulders, ghost fingers
of someone who used
to care.

[English is an ugly language,
not enough ways to say
I don’t like what I’m
becoming]

the evening is a lover
who never loved me right: leaving
telltale bruises where
no one else will see, walking
out the door as I heave
up my various
addictions

meanwhile, she whispers
“it’s a sickening thought—
we’re nothing but speculations
in a dim room”
3am ramblings and conspiracy theories
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know why the monsters tend to come out at night, but they certainly do. You've just put it so well. Paranoia in all its various shapes and sizes blooms after sunset.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
something about the product of tiredness and a restless mind. thank you <3
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love every one of these, but I'd be willing to bet there are a few great poems in here if you broke them up.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hmm that's a good idea, i hadn't thought about it. :heart: thank you
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course. (:
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LetterToRaoulPeck Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Wonderful, thank you for sharing a bit of your soul with us.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3 this is a really vulnerable part of me, i appreciate your kindness
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013
Oh damn! I can't resist faving.... Another one.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
You are welcome, indeed.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student Writer
I adore your ramblings :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student Writer
:icononiononionplz:
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sherbetblooms Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of my messy self and the emptiness I feel at times. The vastness of emptiness - both terrifying and calming. I love the metaphor in the 3rd strophe. The last section is so very haunting - speculations in a dim room. Humans are so small in the grand scheme of things, yes. I really enjoyed poring over this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm so honored to hear you like it :heart: thank you for your thoughts
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
All of your poems just make my heart flutter ^u^
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My thoughts run the exact line as ~half-pixieman.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: you're lovely
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Writer
You seriously write all of my thoughts and feelings and experiences out. Just a lot more eloquently and with better execution.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's always wonderful to know someone else feels the same <3 thank you
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student General Artist
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice......just awesome.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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