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I lost my voice
choking on my own tongue.
The words still spill out
from my eyes.

I bit my lips raw
hoping to stem the flow,
but ideas still drip
from my fingertips.

A soggy brain leaks, I suppose
and all my thoughts taste like tar
Full of ideas but no mouth to speak them with.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing, I love poems with few words but high intensity. They are a real challenge to write.
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Oh my gosh, you know, you are way too sweet :love: I wrote this on a week when I'd written at least ten poems, all of which were horrendous.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
LOL I'm sorry I used Carlo's account. We are chilling at his place.
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I'M LAUGHING SO HARD RIGHT NOW XD
you are so awesome

really, though, thank you for being so wonderful and kind.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
When you say awesome you do mean me, of the two of us?
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That whole comment thing is kind of the highlight of my day xD you're awesome, Alec
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ThyPoetSorcerer Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I have my moments... This one was an accident tho. We should really talk one day, I'm curious as to where your astonishing inspiration comes from.
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you should definitely send me a note when you're not, you know, on your friend's account :D
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CarloGrims Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
As much as I love being sweet to you, it wasnt rly my intention. The will to write even on the cusp of death... Only a true writer at heart could think of such an awesome premise :heart:
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Wise-lies Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very interesting, never quite seen a poem like this. wonnderrrfuull. :heart:
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