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jaundiced hands will not
resuscitate. steadfast nights
have no home (but timely graves)

her eyes dimmed rosy.
discontinued pallid echoes,
bone cages "we're never free"
Achromatic crossovers.

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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very intriguing.

jaundiced is yellow...the first three lines to me are like an old carouser at the bitter end...

The second three lines is someone's half-cynical lament over the imminent passing of the person in the first stanza. (That is a clumsy explanation. :) But the poem is great!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love your explanation! I definitely see what you mean and I love how you interpreted the lines. Thank you so much for the thoughtful comment! :heart:
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! It was my pleasure.

You're very welcome!
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PeircingArrow Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I see this poem as opportunities lost. The times where you really want to do something, but out of fear, or self consciousness, you decide not to do it. Then that night when you are in bed, trying to sleep... you can't. Too focused on your lost decision, your lost opportunity; it feels as if life is passing you by and that you are dying inside. Great poem, I really enjoyed it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"it feels as if life is passing you by and that you are dying inside." I really love that, thank you so much for your interpretation :heart:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
This feels dark to me, and very well done! It has the feeling of stained time, and the way thing accumulate. Excellent read!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygosh I love the way you put that, dear. "Stained time." Thank you!
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
You're welcome! =)
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
I do not have the words to describe the image in my head right now. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're so sweet! :heart:
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