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I dream of the ocean;
that paper-thin line where
the current swallows the stars
and the water churns violet

(you tell me to be
quiet,

dandelion queen, we've
heard all these words before)

tonight
I will sleep heavy
and wake a few hours before dawn,
only to forget my name

my wave-weathered heart will cry,
I will cry (my biggest fear
is drowning in too many
of my own weighted words

you tell me to be
quiet
so I can hear the world breathe)

I want to go home
(i live near the coast, i wish the water was really that romantic)
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is really lovely. I particularly like the first stanza. Your poetry shines.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so sweet :love:
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
once again, the second half of this poem really gets me.
i absolutely adore it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
of course! <3
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randomphilosopher Featured By Owner May 21, 2013   General Artist
It's like I can hear you breathing when I read this poem... and the rise and fall of the ocean's waves. Well done.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow, what a compliment :love:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
At least you live near the coast, I live in a city full of dust and grunchy people. How's that for romantic?

As for the poem, I'm at loss for words! :heart::heart::heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
haha, you can make romance out of anything.

and thank you so much! :heart:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aww you're welcome! :huggle:
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