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i.
dear sunshine,
you are my bruises. welts
along my wrists, fingertips
dancing on my neck. bluebird,
you were a midnight mistake
leaking over the next morning.
you wept and all
the world called you beautiful;
we kissed the naked silence between your bones,
we watched you drown yourself in vodka and not-so-
secrets, and we brought you back to life;
we held you as you quaked
like a tragedy in its first bloom.
I called you beautiful,
and you used all of me
[I am as naked as the breeze, as
useless as a songbird without
a note. I am as hungry
the tide and as lonely
as the moon who calls
upon it; starlight,
you took all of me,
the negative space
between my
lips]


ii.
I fell in love
first with the taste
of you-- good weed
and the resurrection
of unmet expectations. when
you kissed my neck, I was
alive; I was a series of
sparks in a vacuum night.
you were a million moths
blooming within my ribcage, you
were the beginning of the story
I was afraid to open. I fell in love
with the goosebumps that
followed your fingertips,
paralleled shaking; the
hands of a dreamer who
paints the sky as he sleeps
i don't know how to process

i.
i'm sorry if this is visceral and raw i'm trying to understand myself, i'm trying to process how i feel violated and broken and

ii.
sometimes there are silver linings, sometimes people are good



(also i swear no one is physically abusing me. you know how people talk about bad first dates? an old man and his wife ran me over with their tandem bike. the guy i was with had to call 911 because she was unresponsive. just another episode in the terribly awkward romantic life of maddie the unlovable. /endrant)
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry for your bad first date. That really does sound unbelievably awkward. I don't think you're unlovable though. I think you think that, but I completely believe that to be untrue. :heart:

As for the poem....amazing, as usual.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014  Student Writer
:tighthug: It makes me cry. Which is good, you know, when writing brings out the reader's emotions.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
very raw and emotional. i love it so much, it seems like something out of your usual style and you wrote it amazingly well. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm so glad to hear that, thank you <3
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Waffles-Of-Gondolyn Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: but of course boo :heart:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Student Writer
i love this so much. the rawness of it is great.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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ZinnamonSmile Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like it a lot. Big Smiles :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Brilliant lovely poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student General Artist
You're very welcome.
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frightenthelittlesin Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student Writer
so gorgeous O.o it is like you are weaving a impervious web of words around reality...even though the vocables sometimes don't fit really together this sounds more truthfully than anything I've read in quite some time :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Maneki-Neko44 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014   General Artist
Beautiful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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zoefletcher Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
how do you always manage to make things sound so beautiful :twitterpated: 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
awww :love: thank you!
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dreamingshadow Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
second stanza is outstanding
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014   Writer
"I fell in love
first with the taste 
of you-- good weed 
and the resurrection 
of unmet expectations."
i'm stealing your kisses and making them my own. please don't argue this :stare:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
we can shareeee
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
You are easy to understand.

ii.
You are a great treasure of the universe.

i.
They should know better.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you see too much in me :heart:
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