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an angel drifts at the edge of the sky
with dwindling wings, she murmurs 'genesis'
and extends her fingers to try
and catch the pieces of a broken world

"sometimes we just need to burn
to have a way to light up the night"

the ground collapses upwards, and the
clouds come tumbling down-- the stars
awake and smile, they set fire to
desiccate all blinded faith

the masses watch on; glazed eyes,
broken spines, excised tongues-- they
are seduced by the twinkling lights

"destruction breeds beauty and
it seems to go both ways"

as the day decays, their time shatters
until those knuckle-dragging fools
find broken moment shrapnel
deep within their flesh

and the oceans scream out,
washing over their wounds to prove
it can never happen again

"if you have guilt, don't
you think you might deserve it?"

the moon eclipses and the angel
decides the battle was lost
long before it began

she kisses the remnants
of a forsaken land, tenderly

"in the end,
we all
die
alone"
For the Theme of the Month Contest.

"Deliver me from reasons why"
The sweetest goodbye, in my mind, is when even innocence abandons you.
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TehPassenger Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome :D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
Oh dear...everything collapses towards the middle and chaos would ensue were people not blinded by their own needs...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
sometimes falling apart is inevitable. Chaos is as reliable as normality, in that sense.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Student Writer
That's very true.
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sirweston Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While you stretch the imagery on occasion (seriously, "insipid wings"?), on the whole a perfect fit for the theme and a great poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
...I changed that phrase, now D:
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sirweston Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like you're your harshet critic, but I like to send a little contsructive criticism your way.
Sorry for the errors. I'm typing from an e-reader.
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012   Writer
"destruction breeds beauty and
it seems to go both ways"

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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
all the prettiest things are disastrous in their own way
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