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I.
"what do angels dream about?" Lindsay asked
I thought for a minute
"they dream to live like us."
"then why did Rachel want to die?"
"goodnight" I said, and turned out the light
Rachel used to sing to the birds
she said sometimes they just wanted someone to show they cared
and she serenaded them
until she was sure they felt important
II.
in the car, Lindsay broke down
the black veil she wore seemed to be more
than an article of mourning
"why do they make child-size coffins?"
"Lindsay—"
"did you see her?
even dead, her spindly fingers reached out
but… I couldn't grab her…"
I held her hand
because it was the only thing I knew how to do
Rachel used to write notes
she tucked them in branches,
under rocks, between her pillows
she said they were her secrets.
she always wanted someone to find them.
III.
Lindsay shut down
the walls grew darker, the ceiling grew heavy
did you know silence chokes you?
She had a recurring dream
she always woke screaming
I'd hold her and say "I'm here,
I'm here…"
and she'd break down weeping
"no you weren't
you weren't here.
that's the problem"
and she'd weep until she fell asleep
Rachel used to stay up till 11:11 every night
just so she could make a wish
and she'd fall asleep, with a smile on her lips
then every morning she would wake up,
look around, and frown
because her wish hadn't been enough
IV.
Lindsay found her
her blonde hair pulled from her neck
(I seemed to be the only one who thought it looked like a halo)
an old rope pulled taut against her collarbones
Lindsay called me after, sobbing
she'd tried to breathe life back
into Rachel's lifeless form
she kept waiting to see the blood course
through her pale, bruised neck
but she didn't have enough breath
Rachel was gone
It was a few minutes past midnight
and I couldn't help but wonder if Rachel's wish had come true
Rachel used to kiss all of her teddy bears goodnight
she thought it was important they knew she was always there
of course, I'd always just taken Rachel's word
because she'd had to tuck herself in, half the time
she said it was fine, they all could look out for her
she said it was fine
V.
It was only after Rachel died, things came to the surface
we recounted the tears brimming in her eyes
we saw what we had done wrong all along
it's dangerous to live in the past,
but sometimes it's inevitable
when your mistakes haunt you everyday
I found her note, a secret
beneath her pile
of forgotten teddy bears
it's dangerous to live in the past,
but lately the present's just as bad
Rachel used to always ask questions
her head was always so full of thoughts
once, she asked Lindsay:
"where do people go when they die?"
Lindsay replied,
"well, they become angels and live in the sky"
Rachel grew distant, as she did when she thought
then she gazed dreamily, and said
"I've always wanted to be an angel"
"what do angels dream about?" Lindsay asked
I thought for a minute
"they dream to live like us."
"then why did Rachel want to die?"
"goodnight" I said, and turned out the light
Rachel used to sing to the birds
she said sometimes they just wanted someone to show they cared
and she serenaded them
until she was sure they felt important
II.
in the car, Lindsay broke down
the black veil she wore seemed to be more
than an article of mourning
"why do they make child-size coffins?"
"Lindsay—"
"did you see her?
even dead, her spindly fingers reached out
but… I couldn't grab her…"
I held her hand
because it was the only thing I knew how to do
Rachel used to write notes
she tucked them in branches,
under rocks, between her pillows
she said they were her secrets.
she always wanted someone to find them.
III.
Lindsay shut down
the walls grew darker, the ceiling grew heavy
did you know silence chokes you?
She had a recurring dream
she always woke screaming
I'd hold her and say "I'm here,
I'm here…"
and she'd break down weeping
"no you weren't
you weren't here.
that's the problem"
and she'd weep until she fell asleep
Rachel used to stay up till 11:11 every night
just so she could make a wish
and she'd fall asleep, with a smile on her lips
then every morning she would wake up,
look around, and frown
because her wish hadn't been enough
IV.
Lindsay found her
her blonde hair pulled from her neck
(I seemed to be the only one who thought it looked like a halo)
an old rope pulled taut against her collarbones
Lindsay called me after, sobbing
she'd tried to breathe life back
into Rachel's lifeless form
she kept waiting to see the blood course
through her pale, bruised neck
but she didn't have enough breath
Rachel was gone
It was a few minutes past midnight
and I couldn't help but wonder if Rachel's wish had come true
Rachel used to kiss all of her teddy bears goodnight
she thought it was important they knew she was always there
of course, I'd always just taken Rachel's word
because she'd had to tuck herself in, half the time
she said it was fine, they all could look out for her
she said it was fine
V.
It was only after Rachel died, things came to the surface
we recounted the tears brimming in her eyes
we saw what we had done wrong all along
it's dangerous to live in the past,
but sometimes it's inevitable
when your mistakes haunt you everyday
I found her note, a secret
beneath her pile
of forgotten teddy bears
I don't think anyone cares.
I don't think anyone hears.
I know I'm all alone.
Home is where the heart is,
I don't think I have a home
it's dangerous to live in the past,
but lately the present's just as bad
Rachel used to always ask questions
her head was always so full of thoughts
once, she asked Lindsay:
"where do people go when they die?"
Lindsay replied,
"well, they become angels and live in the sky"
Rachel grew distant, as she did when she thought
then she gazed dreamily, and said
"I've always wanted to be an angel"
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I see her every now and then
Just glimpses, but all the same
I know she likes to hide
But it isn't a carefree game
She hides behind fake smiles
Puts on a brave face
For the prying eyes to see
It takes everything she has
To leave the safety of her home
She knows the world for what it really is
She prefers to be on her own
She likes to look at the stars
And pretend to know her future
But she is kept inside by the fear
That comes with being undecided, unsure
She knows how to smile
And mask the emotions that she feels
No one would know that she is abnormal
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You're suffering from the stings
And the causing evil deed
My angels with the cut off wings
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The melody of your pain sings
To me, like a bird unable to fly
My angels with the cut off wings
I tried to stop the running blood
Wanted to dry up sorrow's springs
And to lift you up from the mud
My angels with the cut off wings
You mistook me for an angel like you
But I'm just human with faked things
On my back, who will fall down, too
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I want be your support, not your stress
Yet, I want your trust without strings
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While reason counters either
Drive comes from the same feather
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A chance of evil slipping away
Two knees beneath a pool of tears
Four walls enclosing an echo of laughs
Distance goes to endless measure
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This is a little bit longer and darker than my usual, but it'd mean a lot if you could read it and give me feedback.
(Did I overdo it on symbols? I like symbols...)
(Did I overdo it on symbols? I like symbols...)
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... I'm speechless that I did not comment about this masterpiece.
I sent you the note, no doubt, but still, this work deserves some form of recognition.
Personally, I think it should be featured often - it is, even now, one of your most rigorous works to date: the theme is dark and yet it transitions well; the symbolic relationships described are realistic bordering towards non-fiction brilliance; the dialogue is real; the trauma felt all the way till that last line is haunting to the point of being a beauty from The Other Side; this work's breakdown into parts is even better, because each and every single line could be taken independently.
I'm grateful that I featured this work in my journal, and that even now, ever after all this time, I still think its one helluva skillful play with words to create one awe inspiring story. Bravo.
I sent you the note, no doubt, but still, this work deserves some form of recognition.
Personally, I think it should be featured often - it is, even now, one of your most rigorous works to date: the theme is dark and yet it transitions well; the symbolic relationships described are realistic bordering towards non-fiction brilliance; the dialogue is real; the trauma felt all the way till that last line is haunting to the point of being a beauty from The Other Side; this work's breakdown into parts is even better, because each and every single line could be taken independently.
I'm grateful that I featured this work in my journal, and that even now, ever after all this time, I still think its one helluva skillful play with words to create one awe inspiring story. Bravo.