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and as your sepia-saturated voice fades into the night

you will remember all those dreams you woke from,
weeping, for the conversations you'd never
have and the people you'd never get back

you will remember the flock of birds that used to
reside in your chest, pounding against your
ribcage, crying to be free (and you will try
to remember the day their wings went silent)

as you hear the leaves hum and the sky pulse,
you will try to fall into cadence with the steady
music of nature, but instead begin to believe you're just

an outlier.

you will tell yourself, in your needly, narcissistic
way: you are a falling star, a withering celestial
being- you never quite fit in

and it will mean that the words you had engraved in
your ceiling (the last thing you see before you sleep)
about how one day, you'd mean something, you'd be
something, you would finally morph into a person
beautiful and magical and worthwhile

came to be another poorly told story,
too.

and as your whispers die in an unwelcoming night
you will know

the birds have never [will never] break free.
Sometimes I think we have birds in our chests and whispers in our throat that will never come out.
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
This is incredible in so many ways. :heart: You amaze me. ^^
Some birds have to be let free though, I think. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohmygoodness, definitely. I think we need to let ourselves be free, most of the time. Thank you :heart:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
:iconlainloveplz: :heart:
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am always so emotional at night, my love... I can scarcely say why. I don't think it's just me. ^^ But I haven't the mental stamina to read your work just now. It is making me cry.

So... perhaps later? *smiles*
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh! I'm so sorry! I know what that's like, everything seems to go deeper at night. I hope you don't cry! ^^
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*smiles* Too late, but I don't mind.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh! :huggle: I hope they're at least the good kind.
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Golden-Leaves Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*grins*
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student General Artist
T.T Surely things aren't that terrible?
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh, not all the time! I realize this is a little dismal. I guess, sometimes I just worry I'll never follow through with my dreams.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
Woah. I love this metamorphosis of style you have going on. Every time I read something by you now it sounds fresh and original, and that's honestly brilliant. This was excellent, and I loved the concrete experimentation.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, thank you so much! :love: Just, wow. I'm so happy to hear it works. I keep trying out all these new styles to see what works for me. Again, thank you so much.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, you're really welcome! Absolutely no problem - reading your writing is a joy :)
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012   Writer
stunning. :heart:
reading this makes me think that, too.
but even birds are chained to the sky- nobody is ever free
and maybe it's meant to be that way.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's sort of a dismal thought, but I know what you mean. there's always something else to hold you back.
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Professional Writer
This is wonderful like so much of your other stuff. I wish I had your vigor again. I miss the days where the poetry ran from my mind to my fingers and dripped from my fingers to the page.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't be hard on yourself! You have a lot on your plate, writing is time and energy consuming. To be honest, I don't even know how I get mine done half the time .-.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Student Writer
That's just, the message of lost, hopeless dreams, it's sad but the images and everything breathe life into the message... does that make any sense at all? ^^;
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it does. As though the poem thrives, despite it being dark, because of its images.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
Exactly! :glomp: I'm glad that made sense to you =D
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great opening line.

I like the imagery throughout this. such a tragic feeling in this but it is so beautifully conveyed.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! that's what I was hoping for.
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emilyericson Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Geez your poetry makes me want to have your little literary babies. Too bad that's biologically impossible.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
my poor infertile poems ;n;
Thank you for that unbelievably awesome compliment :tighthug:
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februaryblue Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful, too. I looked at it and saw myself, how if I can't have who I want, then I better damn well fight for what I want, even if I can't have that either.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: That's a very positive attitude. Take advantage of what is yours before it is too late.
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februaryblue Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yep! Exactly. :)
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