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1.
i wake up and tear the sun
from the sky like this is a
grade school art project and i
am supposed to share something
worthy of myself-- i think

there is a black hole nestled
betwixt my lonely ribs,
devouring anything alive.

on days like these, my greatest weakness
is weakness and i am my own fatal flaw.
we live by mantras and my ears ring
‘i hate every piece of me’

(he put his head to my chest
and heard me dying;

call me beautiful now)

2.
we are the false ends of sunken
universes, we are pieces of
dead galaxies and you are
stardust,  god, you are

beautiful.

i believe that this is all just a dream
by someone with an imagination
bigger than the word “no,” that we
are pawns in a game not worth
remembering, but when i’m with you

i’m real.

i never took kindly to things
that required codependency,
the uncalloused portion
of my frostbitten heart

but god, you are
beautiful.
two unrelated poems

2) i love a friend and i wanted to be able to tell her why
1) my head is not so good right now

i think they go together but my judgment might not be the best at this moment (refer to 1)
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Writer
They really do come together, lovely. :heart:

"but when i’m with you i’m real." so simple and yet so stunning. This whole thing is, really. Your writing is all the time, really.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asljdaljfsa stop being so wonderful :tighthug:
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flummo Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Student Writer
nuuu neverrrr :huggle:
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Lawlessness45 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
we are the false ends of sunken 
universes, we are pieces of
dead galaxies and you are
stardust,
 
 I love the metaphor here. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i suppose it is a metaphor, but i meant it literally, too ;p we're made of the atoms of exploded stars
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Lawlessness45 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I didn't even think of that! Ha...in that case, great literal usage. 
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love both of these poems implicitly for their familiarity and honesty and I must say, both resonate so much. The first was me, years ago and the second :giggle: the second is me (in many ways) every day. You are so perfect and brilliant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 thanks so much
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, Miss Intricately Extraordinary :D
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're beautiful :heart:
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