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the fire takes out all my fight
its blaze consumes the frozen night
and sets my blackened heart alight
it burns so bright, it burns so bright

the flames will partner with the breeze
until it swallows all it sees
it melts away the looming freeze
and no one flees, and no one flees

the crackling embers sing their song
as mass destruction joins along
the heat has never felt so wrong
all life is gone, all life is gone
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~LightOverpowers58 Jul 4, 2012  Student Writer
pretty good rhyme scheme, amazing imagery, all in all an amazing poem!
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*Parsat Feb 27, 2012  Student Writer
Out of the group of four poems you submitted to FFF, I liked this one the best: It really takes the form of the monotetra and moves along with it, taking the repetitive rhymes and almost feeding it to the hungry flames you describe.
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*intricately-ordinary Feb 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
sadly, I can't submit it though :( I added this to dA prior to FFF so it's against the rules to put it in the contest. I still hope to put a different monotetra in the contest... But thank you so much! I love this form the most, I think
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