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Gracefully fading-
Like a photograph in time,
Uncolored with age
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Endings resemble
What once were the beginnings:
Ongoing circuit
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Reminders linger-
Never to be found, but beg
Always to be known.
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Wishes with feathers
Anchored by reality
Yearn, but yet, fade
An Acrostic Haiku for [link] I would really love feedback. I don't do a lot of haikus, so I'm not sure if it has the right effect. To help me out, I use fade again in the last stanza as a throwback to the first: does that work well, or is it redundant? Thanks!
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MirachRavaia Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations! You have been featured here: [link]
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank-you very much!!
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
gratz! you have earned an honorable mention in #formfindsfunction's first real contest!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it was difficult trying to write haikus/ senryus...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank-you :)
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deinktvis Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Writer
:D
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student Writer
you are all entered up :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank-you :)
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