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it seems that by now I’ve been diagnosed
with a mild case of weightlessness, mindless
drifting past empty homes and the emptier people
that purchased them.  I remember conversations

with you about existentialism
and the almost intricate fabric of my mind and
everything in between, and you-- the way you
paused before making a point as
the words defined themselves in your head:

I remember the day I told you I was God.
Creator of all things unimportant, trapped
in the body of a girl with nothing left to give, you
believed me

it must be a beautiful place
inside your head, with a world
that revolves around hope and expectations
the way it was supposed to; all
storybook-perfect like the
wars promise we’ll one day

[I’d like to think that every great leader
once cried themselves to sleep wondering
if they’d ever mean anything and
did things to stand out like smoking
or drinking or pretending to be someone
they’re not and every morning they’d tilt
their head in the mirror trying to find the angle
where things just looked “right,” before deciding
they were worth more than that,

just to know I’ve got somewhere to go]

to whom it may concern,
forget me as soon as you can. replace me
with the constellations in the sky
the shimmer of the waves and the
gossamer webs tying you down
to a life you weren’t ready for;

people keep trying to save me with things like
self-preservation and religion and social
obligations and novels about all the ways
I should be ashamed of myself and
The Path to fix it
 (step one: become someone new
  step two: repeat)

I feel like I lost my voice on
all these people who don’t understand me,
proclaiming these words I’ve said
a million times before because
I still cannot hear them. adulthood
is slowly going deaf and calling it wisdom,

I guess it’s about time
I grew up.
I'm trying out new things because I've been frustrated with my writing for a while. Still not quite happy with this.

true story: i once told a boy i was God and he believed me
truer story: people keep wanting to fix me like i'm broken
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
First off, you're not broken. I want you to be happier (and I'm sure you want that too; we all want that for ourselves, right?), but that's quite different.

Secondly, growing up is really overrated. And once we grow up, I think we lose a little of the magic that is us. So don't do it completely.

And thirdly, this is fantastic. Just fantastic. I really tried to pull out some of my favorite lines here, and I couldn't do it, because the whole thing is my favorite. You just take things that are so universal to the human condition and then so uniquely you and just say them as perfectly as it can ever be said. You are wonderful and I am just so incredibly glad to have found you and your beautiful words. :heart:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh thank you so much :love: every once in a while I wonder why I'm still writing, and someone leaves a comment like this that makes me remember the importance of it all. growing up really is overrated, but thank you for your sentiments and kindness <3 they mean the world to me
haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Deaths-Lament Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful and heart breaking and undeniably true.. I feel like this needs to be shown to everyone in the world, stamped on buildings and embedded in the minds of every person ever. I  feel like you just wrote down the words imprinted on the souls and hearts of hundreds of people and I've been left speechless by the beauty of it. :heart:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh god this is such a wonderful comment, i am absolutely touched to know you feel that way :heart: thank you so much
flummo Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Student Writer
storybook-perfect like the
wars promise we’ll one day

"(step one: become someone new
step two: repeat)"

we're all a little messed up. that's alright. i like to believe that the right in people outweighs the wrong. at least, it should. :hug:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i like to believe that, too :tighthug:
fuzzforbrains Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Student Writer
Perfection. I've felt this way a thousand times and yet your words remind me of the bittersweet beauty of not knowing who you are and what you are to do in this life.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: This is so beautiful. I love all of your writing.
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