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he always spoke of the romantic stance in a smoker
whose every gasp was like a suicidal swansong, he
wrapped himself up so tightly in unwarranted wishing, when
they stripped him free, he then stumbled into the sunlight
and burnt [out]

no one laced his pillows with lavender and moonbeams
and all the other things that call dreams out from
hiding; but he still prayed upside-down overdone
every evening for a falling star to find its way
back home.

instead, they surrounded him with [a grain of]
salt circles like curses to draw out the weaknesses
temptation had embedded in him, because
nothing beautiful was ever built atop a rotten foundation
(one exception: architecture of shattered resplendence)
and no one ever got anywhere by treating the
thorns in their side as a reminder to remain
more prominent than the injuries they would inflict.

he's broken (he does not reflect) he wanes and worries
as his heart choruses "not enough," ever-growing
as his fears acclimate and his pulse sings- some
things remain unfixed;
but he takes pride in the intrinsic etches of
his eyes, he flaunts that he's an insomniac
who knows the true gravity in a pair of
rotating hips.

when he cries, he ages backwards, and newborn
tears mar his face. fleshy soft scars remind
him only of where he came and
the cycle repeats.
he believes the world to be a faltering masquerade
where deception is beauty and the only sin is not
keeping up,

he confuses splinters with splendor, and upon his
breakdowns he mistakes crumpled form and lackluster
longevity for something truly special.
Life never returned his sentiments.

I've been inspired lately by a lot of things people I care about have said and a lot of beautiful spoken word I've been listening to. :love:
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This is incredible and interesting! Spectacular job! You really played with my imagination and I feel like I could envision him so clearly! A very compelling and sorrowful story!
:love: I'm so happy he was a vivid character! Thank you!
You're welcome! ^^
Pencil-Wolf Dec 9, 2012  Student General Artist
I love this. And I wish I could give you a more insightful comment as to why, but I can't seem to find the words. I just love the poem in its entirety. ^^ I wish I could read it aloud at the moment, because it seems like it'd be one of those poems that sound so much more powerful out loud, but unfortunately I can't. :XD:
intricately-ordinary Dec 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy you enjoyed it! Thank you so much :heart:
Pencil-Wolf Dec 10, 2012  Student General Artist
You're so welcome! ^^
Sammur-amat Dec 8, 2012   General Artist
There is so much to call splendid in this piece! :love:
Excellent, excellent job, sweetheart! :tighthug:
intricately-ordinary Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm absolutely honored! Thank you so much! :heart:
Sammur-amat Dec 8, 2012   General Artist
You are so very welcome, maddielove :heart: :heart: :heart:
silver-ships-fly Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wonderful poem!
i never have good enough words to
say when it's about your writing.
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