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rum-lust lips make gentle friends,
words slurred in hands blurred,
burning in between the lines to find
some
drunken concoction of wilted laughs
and heavy sighs, scented sultry
with desperation.

you are that
rasping in my throat when my voice
deteriorates and I am left breathless
and hopeless and raw, my
muscles ache in memory of the
motions to forget-
we do not let go.

and cold beds call, stability,
metal frames and sunken heads –
rest now, rest with
a prayer on your lips you don't
care to share, a dream in
your mind you'll never get back;
rest and the earth will lend you peace
and

you will stop. the rivers will clean
your bones; the sand will smooth
your tongue; you will stop, brain blank,
as smooth ivory promises persist.
(interpretations mean less than nothing)

you will stop and rest,
finally,
at peace.
and in that moment, it truly felt like a dream
(you never woke up)
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Perfling Apr 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Was reading this without knowing the author, and wasn't surprised to see it was you ;) - fantastic as always!!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
thank you so much!
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thepoetboy Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(sorry, comment entered somehow!)

and cold beds call, stability,
metal frames and sunken heads –
rest now, rest with
a prayer on your lips you don't
care to share, a dream in
your mind you'll never get back;
rest and the earth will lend you peace
and

you will stop. the rivers will clean
your bones; the sand will smooth
your tongue; you will stop, brain blank,
as smooth ivory promises persist.


this part is so beautiful i love the image of the metal frames and sunken heads and the rivers and sand smooth tongue and god smooth ivory promises. beautiful imagery with beautiful meaning.

not to mention i adore the and in that moment, it truly felt like a dream / (you never woke up

truly gorgeous like you!♥
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thepoetboy Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
god this is beautiful. i adore this line here:

you are that
rasping in my throat when my voice
deteriorates and I am left breathless
and hopeless and raw


its just really powerful and moving. ugh how do you write so well, doll?

this whole
this whole part here though
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the rivers will clean
your bones; the sand will smooth
your tongue; you will stop, brain blank,
as smooth ivory promises persist.


God that's beautiful. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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:iconglossolalias:
your work has been featured here: [link] please go check out the other pieces & have a nice day :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygosh you're wonderful :heart: you have such amazing features, thank you so much!
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:iconexistencewesummonyou:
Oh, I love the ecstatic cascade of sounds in this poem - "words slurred in hands blurred,/ burning in between the lines" - my tongue just tumbles effortlessly down lines like that - good stuff!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
:love: thank you! It was so much fun to write out and read, too :heart:
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