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she speaks in vinegar riddles
and bides her time in shipwrecked
smiles- she's
ticking off days for the boy
with stormy eyes who promised
he'd be back in a season or
two.  he, who was

crafted from the leftover bits of the moon
and the meandering sky with runaway
stars lurking deep beneath his ribcage,
waiting to fall whenever he spoke
like a saint, whose divine sacraments
parted land and birthed lives; like a
sorcerer whose words launched a
thousand sunken ships but

now, she pops pills like reminders,
stabilizers that last 4-6 hours
depending on her ability to forget

and she's lost in herself
again, among faltering brainwaves
and wavering heartbeats and the
whimpering echo of her own worst fears

like: he's gone and he took all
that's good of me with him,
my weighted bones and my bated breath
and my lingering hope, too

that thing with feathers that
cries when it's plucked clean,
skeletal and bare and smooth
enough for me to rest my weary head on.

see, the ocean cracked and regurgitated
a misspent, unforgiving gust of
exhausted promises.

she still wears the necklace he
gave her, the wanderer who crafted
wreathes of forget-me-nots to bring
about the
sweet tongue she carried, now
turned salty and bitter and
perhaps a little toxic
too, because regret always
tastes the same brand of

she decided
the most important word in life is goodbye.
Every story needs a conclusion.

(I'm beginning to realize that whenever I don't know what to write, I use a whole lot of silly imagery)
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi lovely :wave: I've featured your wonderful work here: [link] :happybounce:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're the loveliest! :tighthug:
InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^ :aww: thanks :). you're welcome :)
BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Hey there I featured this piece here and just thought I'd let you know.

DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The artist's comment made me giggle - silly imagery! Sometimes, it may feel as though you are grasping, but it's all coming from the same place... and sometimes our minds are a crazy, convoluted place... as silly as it might feel, it certainly comes off quite differently :heart: And your imagery... ooooh :worship: It is something I admire about you so completely and utterly - I may even be jealous! And, as always, your word choice! Shipwrecked smiles & stormy eyes - now, she pops pills like reminders - whimpering echo... :heart: I love, love, love-love, love-love-love this!
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My mind is most always a crazy and convoluted place! Haha, and thank you! Imagery is just my favorite thing ever, I love using it and I love writing it even more. Thank you so much, I'm so happy you love it! :aww:
DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
;D It sounds like it could be likened to the most oddly organized yet most beautiful garden ever :heart: You're welcome! I can see that - it is definitely something that you use in a wonderfully skillful manner. It is my pleasure, Miss Intricately :worship:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
Not silly, it's really good imagery!

That last stanza... :wow: It's just perfect.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
AHH thank you so much! :heart:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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