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the ground is a friend, feeble feet meet stability
and never return. it listens, oh, it listens
with tiled ears and absorbs all your secrets.
fault cracks, your fears seep underneath
the pavement, someone knows
that you cry at smoggy nights and
run out of words when you stop to breathe
and you drown in your thoughts, no
one taught you to swim, your

stunted, stilted stature goes stagnant and
this is destiny. it was written in
the storybooks that the princess would find
an answer in the murky depths and her
prince would turn out to be the
desperate attempt at normalcy all along

(raw,
plunging face-first through
vibrant vertebrae,
loosely plucking  stray
strands of sensitivity

and smothering the catalyst,
softly, as it sleeps--

numbness.
deafening life like
being buried in a coffin
facing the earth; digging
and digging and only
eating more dirt

skin and stale sorrows
can't be processed by
these bedded beggars,

going home empty handed to
wonder under a heavy
home of hung humanity.)

you
want it to be over, more than anything,
you want to be relieved of that weighted
day waiting on your neck.

you want
to go to sleep.
Humans can't devour oceans.

this was largely inspired by the fantastic way *0hgravity organizes his poetry
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
How are you so talented?! Share your wisdom with mee :worship:

But seriously, this is really fantastic. You've strung only the best words together and the line breaks are perfect and that first stanza and all that alliteration are just gah. I can't express how amazing this is, please excuse my babbling.

I would totally buy a book of your poems. DO IT!! :la:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asdfhjksshgdahkjfs late response but my gosh this comment is so motivational to me :tighthug:
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Cannibalope Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
If you put your poems in a book I would buy a thousand copies.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness, that's quite the honor ;u; thank you so much!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your use of alliteration is awesome!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome! :)
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your expertise knows no bounds :bow:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :hug:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're always welcome, Miss Maddie :bow:
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