There's a cemetery deep below the sea;
There the space is reserved for fools like me.
Tried to kill myself at least a dozen times,
But nothing seemed to turn out right.
If you want, then when we die,
We'll ascend to some place way up high.
At the gate, they'll show you through.
If they ask me, I'm with you.[link]
The scariest thoughts are the justifications.
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