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you are in love with being in love
like you're caught on the train tracks,
tied down by want, waiting for that
insistent collision to
steal you away into the land
of concussions and self-medication
and hearts that barely heal

ii.
and stories confessing the notches
in your bedpost, the lines in
your smile. the sour note in your
liberally dissonant melody.

iii.
you did not want tangibility

cotton trees cascading and butterfly
innards, serenading clouds and
fluorescent lips
(until the sky came crashing down
and you reoriented the earth)

iv.
you did not want me

v.
I am solid and as notable as
the ghosts sleeping in your ears,
their snores telling time as
the days blur together

I am not of starry kisses and
back porch promises-
I am the wrong kind of accident
on the train tracks.

I am broken,
(but not in the right way)

vi.
I am real

vii.
these are the things we carry with us:
a knife in the side and a
cramp in the lungs; a longing
in the mouth for words or tastes
or people or something more, lyrical
lamentations lingering in our footsteps
like echoes and

barren smiles (like imitations)

viii.
you will yourself so far into these days
there's no way you'll find a road
back home
the territory's barren and deserted
(like the inner lining of your ribs
you cannot shed)

ix.
it's an icy morning when you finally
catch the stalwart echo in the breeze
of the people you locked up long ago,
twice for luck, in a chest of wood and
limitations, under your bed. the frigid
dawn carries its vocal inflection and
vivid reflection

x.
when it whispers, you don't
wake up
And you will never know love.
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featherback Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The entire poem resonates so strongly with me and I'm blown away. Those last lines - oh my god. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: that's such an honor with how much I adore your work and envy your talent, thank you fivever <5
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masvida Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
You. Blow. Me. Away.

Wow.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This comment has made my day. Thank you so much.
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masvida Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
:) glad to hear that!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
I... feel so affected by this... I'm not sad, just... emotional... it's... not quite like dreams being shattered, but the feeling is much the same...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored it was so palpable :heart: Thank you
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"vii.
these are the things we carry with us:
a knife in the side and a
cramp in the lungs; a longing
in the mouth for words or tastes
or people or something more, lyrical
lamentations lingering in our footsteps
like echoes and

barren smiles (like imitations)"
:heart:
Favorite stanza.

You use such incredible imagery. This piece is overflowing with it.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You outdid yourself here. I think I slightly know where you going with this poem, but even if it's not what I think it is your words are completely mesmerizing and carry incredible emotional power. One of my faves among your faves and one of my favorite poems of all times :heart:.

"you are in love with being in love." Indeed!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are so wonderful. I'm pretty sure we both feel the same about this sort of thing, so where you think it's going is correct. (: Thank you for such a kind comment! :heart:
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emilyericson Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm pretty sure you're a masterpiece of the universe and you shed little pieces of that masterpiece all over your notebooks every time you write.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
cjbhzxlcjhbfdzudsvxchj you're unbelievable. thank you so much.
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emilyericson Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're so humble! You are probably the best poet on Deviant Art! There is so much bad poetry on here that it's really hard to find actual talent. You're certainly a rare gem in the realm of people who post their writing on the internet.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your comments are so lovely that I don't know how to respond and I keep them in my feedback box forever ;u; (let me love you!) thank you so so much! :iconsuperheroglompplz:
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emilyericson Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are ridiculously sweet.
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Astoundingly beautiful :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thank you so much!
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Oh, my gods... I read this and the first stanza immediately hit me like a sandbag to the chest, knocking me down and forcing me to listen--so to speak. I half-expected it to be my favourite, but when I continued, I found that the rest painted a much deeper picture than the first stanza alone could do.

So many feels, not enough vocabulary. :tighthug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy! I really hoped it would be able to have that affect, thank you so much! :huggle:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012
:happybounce: Yay! You're welcome, of course!! :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
Oh wow. Wonderful. Amazing. I love it. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ohmygosh, thank you! :hug:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
You're welcome! :iconsmallheartplz:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I'm blown away. This is awesome. :) I really like the fact that you have a couple of one line stanzas.
Fave lines:
"I am not of starry kisses and
back porch promises-
I am the wrong kind of accident
on the train tracks.

I am broken,
(but not in the right way)"
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah- this part's probably my favorite too.
it's all so good though!!!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're absolutely lovely! :huggle:
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! ^_^
<3
:huggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :heart: I tried to contrast the stanzas and keep some really short so it sounded more personal.
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Your words :faint: amazing writer! :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :tighthug:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
You're welcome! ^^
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Discrete little upload, eh?
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had to upload somethinggg, I haven't uploaded free verse in 4 days D:
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
Don't feel bad--I haven't uploaded it in well over a year XD
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
You meant *Discreet, dumbass.
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
:( :( :( :(
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
XD Conversation with oneself. Interrupted. :evillaugh:
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