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she fell in love with the sound of
dying storms, and lost herself in
the blind spots accompanying her
every furtive glance

her downturned spine labeled her:
pitiful,
and her relentless divulging to
overcast skies defined her as
needy; but still she offered the
seeds of her pomegranate heart
to anyone willing to settle down
inside the breeze

and she was abandoned, long ago,
(once upon a time, no one cried)
by wolves with insipid fangs
and human eyes (her glittery irises
never quite belonged)
they discarded her when she asked if
self-delusions were a state of mind

and
she is poorly veiled, so see-through under
our cracked gaze; you can watch her
heart beat and her thoughts spin
(and you can watch her when she
invites death in)

she's a glass asylum, they breathe
in dampened sighs-
and when she shatters to a thousand
pieces, she only smiles
 because love would do the same
Abnormal and infatuated, she wears her story like a second skin.

Feel free to tell me if you don't think the last line works ♥
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Wow. This is better the tenth time i've read it than it was the first. You reach another tragic, beautiful climax, and leave me speechless.

The first two stanzas are my favorite.. the reality of the character is so genuine and in your face.. the idea that settling is all you have left.. wonderfully written,

The last line is the icing on the cake. Absolutely brilliant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh :love: you are so so very sweet, I'm so honored to hear this. Thank you!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're lovely! :heart: thank you!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Featured here: [link] :hug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconepiclaplz: WHAT AN AMAZING FEATURE
I AM SO EXCITED TO LOOK THROUGH IT!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
As always, I love it!
I must admit, the last line threw me off a little. I was reading along, the words taking me away like your work always does, and then, 'because love would do the same'... I'm not sure how I feel about it, and it's just that line, but I don't know what should go there in its place, either.

I love how it's written, like she's saying 'because love would do the same' as she smiles, and maybe I'm just being dim, but I don't see how that line ties into the rest of the poem. :noes:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I wondered if it might do that. Within the context, it's directly referring to the fact she's okay she's shattering, because any form of love would have the same results. But, throughout the poem I tried to show that she didn't quite fit in with everyone else and she was weak, so it was me trying to make a point in saying that love would break her the same way.
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
Ah, well, that makes sense. I'd have to reread the poem with what you just said in mind, but that does put it into a different perspective. :la:
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