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I’ve been living in the same breathy dream
for too many days now; I’m bed-ridden and
stale and I reek of those moments that come
full throttle like a car crash on a winter night

    this is evolution where weak hearts
    are afraid of the shadows and where
    everything changes,
    an apologetic wind births no remorse;
    he will move on—anchored ship
    set sail, I am the sunken wreckage
    that never learned how to swim.
    he will move on, Darwin says
    I never had a chance


I wish I were the textbook sadness,
symptom and solution and endurance
but I’ve spent too long sleeping on the
thoughts of shooting stars and gravity
and reasons, scientific calculations with
thrice-checked proofs for the skeptics
that don’t believe in the sleight of hand magic
reality wants to imply

no,
I am not the insomniac writer with
better things to do than sleep; I am
the heavy bones afraid of what
lies in the darkness beneath
the skeletons of childhood monsters
and promised things.
I'm not so sure how I feel about the ending but I haven't uploaded in a long time, so
here's me.

Sleep is less important, now.

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echoscall Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Artist
Really like. I will figure out exactly why later :-)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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riparii Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
such a beautiful feature, I cannot wait to look through the other works! :tighthug:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Student General Artist
They always say problems have an answer....that there's a solution for every problem. But what happens when you have a dozen symptoms resulting in one enduring problem? Pull one string, you pull them all. Solve one piece, there's still a tangled ball before you. Ramble ramble, my point is, this is both whimsically and darkly written, if that makes any sense. Wonderful work.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know exactly what you mean and I love the way you chose to look at this. Thank you so much for your words :heart:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
You are most certainly welcome.
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the flow of this poem, and the outlying stanza talking about evolution - that's an interesting metaphor to use.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad to hear that, thank you :heart:
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