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the November sky trembles and she's
out sleeping on the railroad tracks, again,
where no one hears her staggered breaths
and stuttered dreams

she promised she'd be back in a few
summers, once the war raging within
her ribcage finally called it quits
(she's so close to raising that white flag,
her fingers plead)

tightrope walkers never feel free, she's bound
by the internal pulsation of her heart, going
stagnant as she gives away the pieces of
herself to people who see her as nothing more
than the wide-eyed doll in the corner, yet
unnamed, forsaken by children with better
things to do

and perhaps these are intrinsic qualities
carved into your bones before you are born,
maybe her parents created her with a
tendency to fail and to cry for silent nights,
and she's right to stop asking questions –
who's and why's are not proper vocabulary
for spirits just whispering through.

these persistent storms overwhelm her ability
to breathe, but she knows was taught
it's alright, it's really alright to be
wasted by thunder as long as you can
emanate rainbows when the weather clears.

sometimes she recites lullabies by memory
about the happily ever afters that fill her
dreams and those sickly sweet promises that
act like medicine for wounded girls who
believe too hard.

they've misdefined her, because it's what
they do best. they never saw the galaxies
in her eyes, they only counted the scars
down her spine (and told her
wounds aren't classy)

her constellation composure and sea-songs were
never enough, so she traded her secrets
in for monetary value; and no one knows
she's built of dollar store stories and overused
clichés, no one sees she's the most brilliant shade
of reverie to ever grace their dull canvas.

They do not revere her, They do not share
a single word with her, but one day, They
will write her the loveliest memorial.
This is my dedication to the lovely :iconfeatherback: She's going to be off deviantART till January, but she still inspires me every single day. I tried to write like I imagine she would (do forgive me if it's not nearly as good as her own.)
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: Thank you so much!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! (:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
:iconaawplz: Beautiful! And a lovely dedication! You both are such wonderful poets! :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: You all inspire me so much, I figured I'd just do one huge poem about how much she influences me because I've been missing her c:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
You're welcome! ^^ You did a beautiful job, I know she will love it! :heart:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012
:faint:

So much love. I put it off and put it off reading this, leaving it and your others since in my messages, because I always read your works (even though I delete all other literature that shows up in my deviantWATCH messages), and I just now got to it. Now I can't figure out why I didn't read it sooner.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm still so honored you read all my works ;u;
thank you so so much! :heart:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012
But of course! I'd have to beat myself up if I didn't, your works are the best! :heart:
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Haanyaan Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Writer
Excuse your perfection *dies*
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're just way too sweet to be real sjghsjkdghjhjskkhgihjksj :tighthug:
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Haanyaan Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
oh, puh-lease you :love:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012   Writer
This is simply wonderful and a very sweet poem. :la:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm honored you think so! :heart:
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ssensory Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012   Writer
You're very welcome! :la:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
It's uniquely your own, and incomparable, just as hers is =) I think it is a most glorious tribute =)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh :love: you're so kind! I tried to write in her fashion, and I included one of her favorite words in the title :la:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
It turned out just wonderful!
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
There is no word in the English language to describe how in love with this I am. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
jshjfdjahgsdhjhfgjsdh you are so incredibly kind :heart:
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Well, my dear, you are so incredibly talented. :heart:
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Scarlettletters Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Professional Writer
You are featured here: [link]
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh my goodness, thank you so much! I cannot wait to look through all the other wonderful art you have amassed!
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012
Simply Stunning.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :huggle:
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this was an absolutely beautiful poem, doll♥
i hope you dont mind me pointing out a bunch of things i liked, because really, the whole thing was moving, set me straight in motion.

first off, i adored the first stanza. it was such a nice and drawing start to the poem. and the second one too, i love "she promised she'd be back in a few
summers, once the war raging within
her ribcage finally called it quits"

and i love the 4th stanza too, its quite lovely, especially the first few lines. the 6th stanza was magnificent, especially the first line "sometimes she recites lullabies by memory" really stuck out to me.

i adore the 7th stanza as well (i told you, i really love this whole poem), but "they never saw the galaxies
in her eyes, they only counted the scars
down her spine (and told her
wounds aren't classy)" was such a beautiful and moving line, it really got to me.

and then the 8th stanza, this one, is my favourite in the whole poem "her constellation composure and sea-songs were
never enough, so she traded her secrets
in for monetary value; and no one knows
she's built of dollar store stories and overused
clichés, no one sees she's the most brilliant shade
of reverie to ever grace their dull canvas."

god, the whole image of trading her secrets for monetary value and dollar store stories and

you have such a way with words, i absolutely adore this poem. usually im so picky about poems i dont even end up favouriting them because i like one half but not the other but this whole poem really just. wow. youre incredible!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ohmygoodness I'm so absolutely honored! you are so sweet! I'm delighted that you enjoyed it consistently, and I can't tell you how much I appreciate this comment. I'm probably going to have to look back and reread it every few hours :heart: words like this, from a fellow poet, certainly make my day!
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
oh gossh, the pleasure is all mine♥♥

i'm honoured that my words mean so much to you :)

youre an incredible talent and a sweetheart as well♥
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
aw, this is such a nice dedication :) although I haven't read much by her I think it does have her certain voicing.

one tiny thing...seasongs...I first saw 'season' then the 'gs' and was confused. maybe hyphen it? I may be the only one who stumbles over this though
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! and rereading that, I see what you mean, and I fixed it.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome :thumbsup:
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