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Good Words. by EveDaniels

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September 20, 2012
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they buried you
with stars in your palms, because
they thought it was a crime
you'd never made a wish in your life

the dirt and darkness
was enough to extinguish
their dying lights

(it's okay, your silent skin
said, softly, I always wanted
the sky to bring me to sleep)

the priest begged, believing you
might rise from the hole
you'd dug for yourself

he wanted to let you know
there was something bigger than all of us,
someplace farther than 6 feet under

(I'm alright, your stony eyes
swore, sometimes falling
feels enough like flying)

their voices all filled with tears
even though you said you weren't worth
their worries, they wept for the future
you wouldn't get to live

(I wouldn't have lived it anyways,
you cooed)

they buried you
near the ocean, where the moon
always shone too bright
so you'd never again have to fear
any monsters of the night

they left flowers, photos, notes
and a little bit of themselves, too
when they finally left you

you believed it was right
even when  the moon fell, abandoned
and the monsters came to steal away
the memories you'd
discarded, along with all prior
awkward instances of mortality

you believed you were right

(I'm going to be fine, I
can make it on my own
you cried, you sighed, I'm
going to be fine and
maybe my dreams
really will come true
you called, you screamed)

but no one ever heard you.
[The first thing I've written that I've actually been proud of in a while.]

Got to thinking about the words some people never hear.
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randomlyinspired-21 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
This is so incredible! :heart: It really left me that lasting aura and impression, plus while I read I really felt every word... :heart:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's what I had hoped to accomplish, I'm so happy. Thank you very much! :heart:
randomlyinspired-21 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
Your welcome! :)
autumnlit Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
Oh this is so sad. Your writing is always so powerful and full of emotion. Words come people never hear and words some people never say. I feel like this poem asks readers to really think about both. :heart:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
that is exactly it, I'm so honored you could pick it up. You are far too kind, your words build me up and make me feel so wonderful. Thank you so much! :tighthug:
autumnlit Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
My pleasure! :la: Thank YOU for sharing!
SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What a lovely, melancholy piece. I got sucked in at the first line, and have read it through at least three more times since XD

I love that the one the poem's speaking about seems to either live in this delusion of contentment, or be unwilling to let anyone know that they need help.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! That's so kind!

People are really interesting in that they both desire and deny help. I left this one really open for interpretation, and people saw what was close to them, I think. Some see a person caught up in lying to themselves, while others see someone struggling to be independent.

Again, thank you. You are fantastic :tighthug:
SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Once again, it was my pleasure, of course! :hug:

I agree, people are strange creatures in that way. We are both complicated and simple, I think.

I really believe you've captured that aspect of humans wonderfully here, excellent work!
Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Absolutely amazing! :clap: :heart:
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