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they built him out of sandpaper
so he could help those
a little rough around the edges

they gave him rose-colored irises
and put his heart in his throat
so he could only speak love

they wrote him a history
deep within his DNA
(lingering, and a little too clingy)
but he learned to live on promises
instead of mistakes

they gifted him off-center feet
that always leaned into his dreams;
he was tall enough to live
with his head in the clouds.

   sometimes waiting gets to you.
   it settles your leaden bones
   and you forget why your legs won't move

   you fall a little too far
   into everything you're praying on,
   and you don't have the strength to
   pull yourself back into normal living.

   but he was different


he didn't believe, he knew
time didn't slip,
he nursed it

and he never broke
even though they piled
the weight of the world
on his expectant shoulders

   he dreamed to mend the darkness.
   they drew the sun
   into his eyes

   he was different.
I use first person so often, now. It was hard to write this without saying "I" at all.
(he was different. I was the same)
So that's where this comes from.

I think my titles are getting progressively weirder.

Well, tell me what you think! :heart:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student General Artist
I loved it :D The descriptions are wonderful :D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aye, thank you so much! I'm so glad! :love:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, very beautiful, and quite creative! I just adore this concept you've created, and how the subject's little quirks seem...

I don't want to say 'odd', but they are a bit odd, but odd in a way that completely makes sense, I think.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's sort of what I was going for. He's definitely different and off-kilter... but somehow that's what makes him seem normal. It's how he was built- it's natural.

Thank you so much! :love:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, dear, of course XD

You write such lovely poetry, by the way; I can't wait to be able to sit down for a couple of hours and read as much as I can in one sitting lol
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
asdfgfdkghjrl you
have seriously made my week.
That means so so much to me.
Thank you, thank you :heart:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm flattered XD

You're more than welcome, of course, dear!
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Oh my goodness, this is so creative! :heart: Another wonderful poem, I'm in love with your artwork! :la:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, that's so kind of you! Thank you!! :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
No problem! ;)
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