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they built him out of sandpaper
so he could help those
a little rough around the edges

they gave him rose-colored irises
and put his heart in his throat
so he could only speak love

they wrote him a history
deep within his DNA
(lingering, and a little too clingy)
but he learned to live on promises
instead of mistakes

they gifted him off-center feet
that always leaned into his dreams;
he was tall enough to live
with his head in the clouds.

   sometimes waiting gets to you.
   it settles your leaden bones
   and you forget why your legs won't move

   you fall a little too far
   into everything you're praying on,
   and you don't have the strength to
   pull yourself back into normal living.

   but he was different


he didn't believe, he knew
time didn't slip,
he nursed it

and he never broke
even though they piled
the weight of the world
on his expectant shoulders

   he dreamed to mend the darkness.
   they drew the sun
   into his eyes

   he was different.
I use first person so often, now. It was hard to write this without saying "I" at all.
(he was different. I was the same)
So that's where this comes from.

I think my titles are getting progressively weirder.

Well, tell me what you think! :heart:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student General Artist
I loved it :D The descriptions are wonderful :D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aye, thank you so much! I'm so glad! :love:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, very beautiful, and quite creative! I just adore this concept you've created, and how the subject's little quirks seem...

I don't want to say 'odd', but they are a bit odd, but odd in a way that completely makes sense, I think.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's sort of what I was going for. He's definitely different and off-kilter... but somehow that's what makes him seem normal. It's how he was built- it's natural.

Thank you so much! :love:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, dear, of course XD

You write such lovely poetry, by the way; I can't wait to be able to sit down for a couple of hours and read as much as I can in one sitting lol
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
asdfgfdkghjrl you
have seriously made my week.
That means so so much to me.
Thank you, thank you :heart:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm flattered XD

You're more than welcome, of course, dear!
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
Oh my goodness, this is so creative! :heart: Another wonderful poem, I'm in love with your artwork! :la:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, that's so kind of you! Thank you!! :heart:
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Pen-and-mouse Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
No problem! ;)
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QueenOfQuills Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Student Writer
Very lyrical and so original! I :heart: the 'off-centre' feet!
I wouldn't worry about your title. Some people argue that it's the most important part of a poem because it steers the reader into readingthe poem in a certain mind/light, so I think the stranger and more abstract title - the better! You can read the poem and interpret it yourself :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are so kind! I am so honored you enjoyed my poem, and the title as well. Thank you very much! :tighthug:
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QueenOfQuills Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :)
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012
You're titles are always extraordinary and perfect! It sounds like such a happy medium, a peace. Not having to fight to be, but just be. This poem sounds so beautiful. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love: I'm so honored you think so, on both accounts. Thank you so much :tighthug:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012
:tighthug: :heart: :iconcocoloveplz:
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like how you describe him, the main character. It's lyrical and beautiful!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, I'm glad you think so :heart:
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sirweston Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Genes or soul? Both? That's the question I think this poem raises.
It's an interesting argument. His personality and genes complement each other, so neither is above the other.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I used to wonder when I was little how much of me was destined to be that way and how much I'd made up on my own.

In this, I wanted to show how sometimes people are born a little different and it is a mix of the two :)
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sirweston Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
More than the sum of our parts, eh?
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student Writer
The title perfectly suits the poem, completely unique, and yeah, somewhere between creation and being. Because it wasn't just how he was created that forms him, but what he chose to do with himself, how he decided to deal with how he was created. It's WONDERFUL!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's exactly what I was going for. I tried to mix in the sense he was made that way but that was actually who he was all along. Thank you!! :tighthug:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! :tighthug:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student Writer
I love the imagery and sense of mysticism that very nearly floats from the screen. :) The title is not weird, it is amazing!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:la: I'm so glad that came out! And that you think the title works! :love: Thank you, you are amazing.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Student Writer
You are welcome!

Bah, no I'm not amazing, but I'm glad you think so.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   Writer
I love the title - definitely not weird at all - it's very interesting.

I love this poem very very very much. This is probably one of my favorites of yours now :D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow! One of your favorite of mine? Yay :dummy: Thank you! ^^
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ssensory Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2012   Writer
Yup! You're welcome XP
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