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one day you'll fly a little too close to the sun
and you'll remember the boy who told you
gas station trinkets were worth more than
the heart you wore on your sleeve.

disillusionment will take you home, and
it will not leave your bed in the morning.
(you will remember he called you loose, too.)

you are the one who believes in smoke
smiles and candid cadavers. no ones'
nose grows, so everyone must be
undeniably true (except

you lie to yourself, too)

a few lifetimes ago you fell in love
with your own reflection, but as you
stripped away layers of common mis-
conceptions, you realized you are not

virtuous and radiant and hung out
only to shine, your paleness is
not purity- only blanched bones.

gravity never liked you and
the secrets you tucked away
beneath your sternum, you're
falling out

you are a moth flitting selfishly,
you only wear your tattered wings.
For those with speckled hearts.
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredibly beautiful :heart: and I find these lines absolutely magnificent:

"gravity never liked you and
the secrets you tucked away
beneath your sternum, you're
falling out

you are a moth flitting selfishly,
you only wear your tattered wings. "

I was also impressed by the continuity and the grittiness of the imagery, it's executed splendidly.

(Coincidentally "gravity" and "moth(s)" are words that I use occasionally, a couple of my poems for sure include both words. They are awesome!)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart: I love those words and all the meaning they hold, especially the way you've used them in your work.
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Wow! So delicate, yet almost harsh, and sad, all wrapped into one. So very descriptive and powerful! :star:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy all of that came out! Thank you! :heart:
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
Anytime! :heart:
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
I can picture you sitting at an open mic night or a poetry slam (yes, poetry slam, that's what I'm picturing right now), reciting this aloud in a kind of haunting voice...

Or maybe that's just the voice in my head that always speaks when I read your work. :dummy:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
awww you're so sweet! my goodness, a poetry slam would be amazing.
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ZaquiaStorm Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
I just wanna go to a poetry slam, I've never been to one. :dummy:
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tiajones Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"disillusionment will take you home, and
it will not leave your bed in the morning."

absolutely beautiful, well written, and painful in such a lovely way. <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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