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All The Poets Come To Life by flummo

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I am not falling-- tumbling through
acrimonious stages of paranoia
meets depression meets all
those things I’ll never reach,

and it’s a quiet green thread that sews
these calloused palms to the gravitation
of your solidarity; dreams revolving
slowly around the circumference
of stranger stars, on their backs
sighing liquored lullabies and drifting
down to sleep.

there are few things in this life
which I know to be real when
I still cry out at night from the phantoms
tearing through my chest, but you are

the sun rising at 3 AM on a
sleepy Wednesday morning and the
last wish birthed on wanting lips and
the persistent anchor, weighing in reverse,
dragging my sunken body out of all this

wreckage: a fresh breath, it is spring
and the air is born again and I am
an inequality of more than I was
yesterday and less than I’ll be tomorrow,
and a contradiction, too, a passerby
in the inevitabilities of my own life
watching, slowly, my ascension to grace
and the subtle beauty of the mirror
changing faces.

you will not know how much you have
given me, the ability to breathe and
the silver lining of a starry night and
most importantly, me.

I am not falling.
Sometimes
-people are colors (green)
-I can actually write a nice dedication

title is awkward. suggestions are welcome.
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so lovely. I love your writing - it's so rich and multi-layered and yet contains some really simple, beautiful ideas.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so honored to hear that! :love:
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Laeneris Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student Writer
Took my words away. :heart: :clap: What a wonderful thing to dedicate to someone!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much~
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like that second stanza. Lovely stuff, Ms. Maddie.
I'll tell ya, there aren't a whole lot of people that are so tolerant of introspection, and even less that can write about it without sounding self-absorbed. You're lovely, and I adore your modest openness. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are just far too kind :heart: Thank you so much for your support.
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: My pleasure.
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, if you find yourself in danger of falling, make sure to grab a parachute.

On a more serious note, I love this. The title seems perfectly all right to me. The first stanza really hit me, because I know every word of the whole "paranoia meets depression" chorus like I was the one who wrote it. ...well, I do write it. My own.

Anyway. I really like this. A lot. I'll shut up now.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, please don't ever shut up. I will never be able to properly tell you how much your comments mean to me :love: thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Student Writer
I love how it starts and ends the same way, this is wonderful!
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