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I used to know a girl for
the hunger in her voice;
she spoke of something
more, worth
anchoring herself to
and sinking down
with

"I think
I'll drink away my memory, soon,
or pray for an Alzheimer-inspired
beginning, because
I can't keep waking up

on the wrong side of life"
experimenting with short poems

(i don't like my writing lately, that's why my work is few and far between, sorry for that)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
powerful words, dear...and this is a fine poem, you don't have to like your writing since we enjoy it enough for you. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're sweet :heart:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Writer
Nah, not really :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such a sad poem. Really beautiful too. :+fav:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You talented talented lady!! I love this! :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: goodness, thank you so much!
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Tragedy is tragic and tragic women utterly break my heart :heart: 

PS, I love your words and any-length poems.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconlainloveplz:
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:worship: :love:
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Petrichor-Paradise Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013
I can't get over
"I think
I'll drink away my memory, soon,
or pray for an Alzheimer-inspired
beginning..."

this is brilliant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: I'm honored you think so
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness.

Experimenting?

How about dominating?

This is just so damn relatable.

I'm marveling in awe.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for the support, I needed it :huggle:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Student Writer
This gave me shivers it was so good, the first stanza is amazing.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I always hate my writing. But you shouldn't. It always comes out so phenomenal that I swear the literature gods chose you as their tragic heroine.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sdlghkjfasdgjsfhakjgdsaldjsalkfjsdgsa;fjdslk;d seriously thank you so incredibly much
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013
"she spoke of something
more, worth
anchoring herself to
and sinking down
with"

I know the feeling. The problem is whenever you try to tie yourself to a rock these days it always turns out to be one of those Hollywood styrofoam faux-rocks and you find yourself floating away again. That probably doesn't make much sense. The point is that I think this is quality, relatable poetry. Good day.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It makes a lot of sense. We find our gravity in things that were never planets to begin with. Thank you so much for the comment <3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"Alzheimer-inspired beginning" is an interesting thought.


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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i kept wanting to use that term in a poem, but i wasn't sure how. still not sure if i pulled it off right.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, I know the feeling.
hmm, I think it worked for the most part ^^
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Student Writer
I really like it, it might be short, but it has a lot of impact in its words :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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JayDanjerCobain Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this. I tend to prefer shorter poems and this is wonderful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much
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R-Bans Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know thw feeling -not liking what you write- I've always had it. Indeed, such a nice work, congratulations!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's a terrible feeling. thank you!
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vergilusphoenix Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And you know what! You're experimenting is giving out amazing results! :D
This poem really gave me words for feelings I could never speak out :)

Also It seems like you're reading minds! :P
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! glad to hear it
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Please don't hate you're writing. It's so lovely and emotive. :heart: I love reading it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :huggle:
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Welcome
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an incredible piece, well done. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :huggle:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :hug:
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