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I wrote you a poem.

skeleton smile-- moonbeams
drip from your unharnessed
habilitations; you speak and
ravens tear through your throat
(I will be there) you are
a catalyst whose ghost eyes
died for a better day

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unaware promise bearer, take
me away. as you live these
beautiful vanities, take me
away

somewhere refined and romantic
like the lies you languish, where
a heavy heart weighs up to
something nice

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primed and pruned, I am
a seedling: an exaltation to
all that is you

we both cry the same kind
of quiet, and whisper the same brand
of please-don’t-listen-close; I
just want to leave before I break
when you [do it first] decide there is
a life worth more than the scars
I bear (though I mostly want to ask

does it ever go away?)

iv
churning repetitions of an
unmentioned time, I carry you
within my mouth; tucked away and
slowly disintegrating the things
I barely speak:

(you saw more of me than either of us
could admit) the time for letting go
has passed me by
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Each section is something I'll never be able to tell someone in my life.

I may do this again. It was passive aggressive therapeutic.
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~j-uyen3 Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ASDJKLFHJL I never commented on your work before because I fear I'm too stupid to say something as meaningful as all the others who comment, and I'll sadly admit that half the time I don't entirely understand all the vocabulary (LOL I sound stupid). But, I do read all your work that you've posted ever since I watched you on dA and I felt the need to say that I LOVEEE THIS. SO MUCH. :heart:
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*intricately-ordinary Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh gosh that's way too kind ;u; you never have to be afraid to comment, haha, no one is going to judge you. And thank you so so much!
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~j-uyen3 Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahaha I know but in the end I still feel awkward about commenting sometimes. xD
You're welcome!!! :la:
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*MattVoscinar Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
Holy. Shit. That is my critique. Holy shit.
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*intricately-ordinary Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope that's for good reason, then, but ashjdgashkjghhas
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*MattVoscinar Feb 26, 2013  Student Writer
It's your writing. I don't think it can be taken any other way.
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*intricately-ordinary Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hush, you're too lovely. I envy your talent.
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*MattVoscinar Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
Bah! Your poem made my eyes go from: o.o to O.O and inspired me to write. Your gallery is a pool of inspiration and joy.
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*intricately-ordinary Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
then I'm so excited to see your writing! :la: (and still incredibly honored)
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"Clipped wings and caged: unable to fly."

"Why hide real inside? Come, now, is it truly so bad?"

"No, my dear, but it may be all we'll ever have."
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