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you've a soul of gold,
a feat untold in our
lonely rusted world

you make clouds more
than a fable- you enable beaten down
dreams to finally soar

you have words like oxygen,
necessary to live, treasures
you would readily give

     we wish upon them all who try to stand so tall.
     in the end, why is it every person seems to fall?
     not you.


I imagine your chest sings
all answers, which your mouth then
tries to translate and share

does your heart grow weighted
or are you really free?
if you're truly so wonderful,
why stick around
with the lost and found?
there's nothing nice to be.
     
     we're tainted. broken. here,
     backbones hold priority
     over silken hands, a steady heartbeat
     and eyes that really see.


those tongues who like the taste
of truth, even freshly born, are
far beyond youth.
you have always been old.

with a mind aged beyond your years,
and a body that has gone far
past its mileage,
in heartbeats and tears.
living among wreckage, you are
forever prevalent.

     there are no directions-
     everything is smoke and mirrors,
     boogie monsters and childish fears.
     this is who we've grown to be.


but you are real
rib-crushingly, blindingly
genuine- you bleed, contradicting
other's plastic veins.

and I'm beginning to think,
maybe I was imaginary all along.
because I never felt alive, until
I found out I was wrong.

     I'd built a house on the foundation
     of stable lies, and it's a surprise
     that buried in there might be reality
     and some honesty, deep deep down.


you make it clearer with
every undeserved word,
there's something much better than this.
I found out I was wrong.
maybe perfection does exist.
To the person who was able to make me cry from happiness.

Written for #APictureToA1000Words theme of the month contest about perfection.

(On a related note, I can't handle it when people are excessively nice to me. I never know how to react.)
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
and I'm beginning to think,
maybe I was imaginary all along.


i love that. it can mean so many different things and has such a bitter and lonely feeling to it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad you were able to find that in my writing. Thank you so much :heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome (:
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featherback Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I imagine your chest sings
all answers, which your mouth then
tries to translate and share

I absolutely ADORE that stanza in particular. The whole piece is beautiful! I want to say more but I'm speechless ;A;
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
He's just so honest it's unnatural D:

You are so beautiful :love: thank you so much, dear :tighthug:
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
All I can say is... perfection really does exist :)!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
There are a few wonderful people out there who would lead me to believe that is true :)
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infinitelove143 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The same thing applies to me :)

P.S. Love your avatar! A little kitten on the outside, a strong lion on the inside
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! It's really small, but another part of the picture is that the little kitty is looking in a mirror and seeing the lion. It thinks very highly of itself :dummy:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student Writer
Oh. Aw. This is just. Wow. I love this! :tighthug: It's such a marvelous dedication.
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