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months later and I'm still pulling pieces of you from my wounds;
memories are salt and you were the ocean that never dried out.
selfishness is the wear of the weary – I wonder, now, how much life
can you steal from a ghost?

my stomach still sinks, I've swallowed too many words. you were
the anchor that allowed me to drown. you were the siren that never
sounded sweet. when the noxious night comes I don't know who's in
the mirror (or what hollowed eyes mean.) am I the one or the nothing
that died out?

I tried so hard, I tried so hard to lose my shadow and forget myself
somewhere dark. I'm trapped between hell and a hard place,
trying to build heroes from ashes and saviors from sunken men.
I tried so hard, and I lost myself again.

what's that coming down? the ground is littered with pieces of me,
the most painful part is remembering;
it's time to let it all go.
What's that in your mouth, the curse or the key?

For *glossolalias' musical prompt game, my song: Girl and The Ghost
So many good lyrics in this song. So. Many.

(there's a lot of me in this one)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
An incredible read with an affluent rhythm, but this line hit me like freight train:

'I wonder, now, how much life
can you steal from a ghost?'
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy to hear that, thank you so much! :heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :rose:
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tiajones Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
this would be incredible as a spoken word
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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TheAntiAnti-Drug Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Ooh, this is one of my favorite pieces so far.
The voice is very strong and the language is insightful and clear.
The last three lines hit me just right.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy to hear that! This piece was a little out of my comfort zone, I'm honored to hear it had an impact. Thank you so much :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wonder, now, how much life can you steal from a ghost?
great line.

I think you did a nice job of capturing the feeling of the song your words.

also, Carina Round is creator of one of my favorite songs, haha.
this one's pretty good.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart: I took my favorite ideas from the song and added in parts of me. c: I loved it, *glossolalias gave me a good one
(PS it's wonderful to see you back :huggle:)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :)
yes and you did good with it...or well, I suppose?
(it's nice to be back :hug:)
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