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the flies are in the food, again.
festering, feeding- because i sewed
shut my lips when you warned me
they were a gaping wound.

silence is the best kind of infection;
you can't know what's kept inside

ii
i carry little girl dreams
of dying and coming back
diseased, depraved, an atrocity;
at least then I'd be something
worth writing home about

i deserve more than what
i am- i am selfish and
greedy, but not strong
enough
to steal a life worth living

(look at me now, mom
i'm growing into the
ugly thoughts i birthed.
i think this is what it must feel like
to finally follow through)

iii
there are things you never say:
no one ever wants to
face their mortality
head-on.
i will die and i will bring
my rotting mind with me;

the sun will rise again, brightly,
a little less burdened


the worst eulogy, it seems,
is a finger pointed towards
a world unwelcoming:
(look at me now, mom
i'm something worth writing
home about, i finally
followed through)

iv
there's a skeleton's breath
on the back of my neck,
a reminder I was born
wrong human

the flies are in the food, again
i think i'm going home
give them a reason to hate you

I'm getting back on my feet, slowly, but surely.
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
iv was by far my favorite stanza. It summed up the entire thing, and it would've been powerful enough to stand alone. I loved it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ohhhhhajdkhfkjsh thank you :heart:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
I was born wrong human. ....that is such a powerful line. I love it.

This poem is very very powerful and full of emotion. Wow. This is definitely one of my favorites of yours. Such an amazing poem....
This one deserves a DD
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored you think so, I certainly had a lot of fun writing it :heart: thank you
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome! It looks like it was fun writing it. :la:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i. did a nice job of setting up the tone for the rest of the piece.

I liked:
i am selfish and
greedy, but not strong
enough
to steal a life worth living
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I tried to think of a good way to show something vile. Thank you so much!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you succeeded.
welcome!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student Writer
:glomp: I hope it continues, getting back on your feet.

Appropriately appalling indeed =D
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