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the flies are in the food, again.
festering, feeding- because i sewed
shut my lips when you warned me
they were a gaping wound.

silence is the best kind of infection;
you can't know what's kept inside

ii
i carry little girl dreams
of dying and coming back
diseased, depraved, an atrocity;
at least then I'd be something
worth writing home about

i deserve more than what
i am- i am selfish and
greedy, but not strong
enough
to steal a life worth living

(look at me now, mom
i'm growing into the
ugly thoughts i birthed.
i think this is what it must feel like
to finally follow through)

iii
there are things you never say:
no one ever wants to
face their mortality
head-on.
i will die and i will bring
my rotting mind with me;

the sun will rise again, brightly,
a little less burdened


the worst eulogy, it seems,
is a finger pointed towards
a world unwelcoming:
(look at me now, mom
i'm something worth writing
home about, i finally
followed through)

iv
there's a skeleton's breath
on the back of my neck,
a reminder I was born
wrong human

the flies are in the food, again
i think i'm going home
give them a reason to hate you

I'm getting back on my feet, slowly, but surely.
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
iv was by far my favorite stanza. It summed up the entire thing, and it would've been powerful enough to stand alone. I loved it.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ohhhhhajdkhfkjsh thank you :heart:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
I was born wrong human. ....that is such a powerful line. I love it.

This poem is very very powerful and full of emotion. Wow. This is definitely one of my favorites of yours. Such an amazing poem....
This one deserves a DD
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored you think so, I certainly had a lot of fun writing it :heart: thank you
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012   Writer
You're very welcome! It looks like it was fun writing it. :la:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
i. did a nice job of setting up the tone for the rest of the piece.

I liked:
i am selfish and
greedy, but not strong
enough
to steal a life worth living
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I tried to think of a good way to show something vile. Thank you so much!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
you succeeded.
welcome!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student Writer
:glomp: I hope it continues, getting back on your feet.

Appropriately appalling indeed =D
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Me, too. Thank you :hug:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome.
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my-sweet-surrender Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i deserve more than what
i am- i am selfish and
greedy, but not strong
enough
to steal a life worth living

^i love this part.
amazing. x
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so happy, thank you so much :heart:
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my-sweet-surrender Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are very welcome!!
i love the way you write!
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sirweston Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Worthlessness, the annihilating nature of time, all side effects of mortality. I don't fear the reaper, but I think you do.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
In this poem, I tried to show how sometimes living is scarier than dying.
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sirweston Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Being wrong is just so damn refreshing.
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screaming-sapphire Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful, I actually teared up reading this because it's just so striking :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can't believe it had such an impact, you are so sweet
thank you :heart:
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screaming-sapphire Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem at all :heart:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Oh this is lovely. I do not know how you manage to continually write things that stop me in my tracks as I read them, but you are getting to be pretty damn good at it. I love the idea, and I love the way you put words together in ways i'd never think of.
Fav line: "the worst eulogy, it seems,
is a finger pointed towards
a world unwelcoming:"

Also the first stanza is brilliant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
When horrible things happen, no one ever wants to blame themselves.
I'm so honored you thought so highly of this piece (honestly, I was just gushing all over the place when I first read your comment.) You are so wonderful, and these remarks mean so much from a writer of your skill.
Thank you! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Quit making me cry. =(
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so sorry! I never want to do that ;n;
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I feel your words is all. <3
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student Writer
this is so much. the intensity just rocks the insides in that raw, emotional sort of way. There are so many words [good ones] to bombard you with. But for the sake of my drugged up mind, I'll say this is fucking amazing [i felt the need to swear this morning].
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you felt the need to swear.
I guess... I don't know, sometimes it feels like the best way to get through is intentionally scraping by.
Thank you :tighthug:
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome. you are too amazing for posh and ordinary adjectives[so why not swear to kick things up?]
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Cannibalope Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Painful, drastic and true. My heart goes out to you.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much :heart:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is lovely.

Can I just tell you how much I absolutely adore your word choices and phrasing?

there's a skeleton's breath
on the back of my neck,
a reminder I was born
wrong human


So perfect.

To me, I think it feels like both a hatred and acknowledgment of fault in both that of one's own life, and the lives of humans in general.

I hope that makes sense lol;

Anyway, such wonderful work as always, dear!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That definitely makes sense. And I certainly think it's what happens, too, when anyone berates themselves: they tear down who they are as well as what made them that way.
Thank you for such a lovely comment, dear :heart: it means the world!
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'm so glad it does XD;

My pleasure entirely, sugar! It's always such a treat to read your work. ^^
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