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and here I am, reinterpreting the definable universe
in relation to you, the poet, and the gravitation
of your hips (the parentheticals of your sighs, the longing
in your star-ward cries, the vespertine scent lingering
on your weary skin).

I would love every piece of you. I would stay up too long
and watch the night crumble away, to whisper together
the scraps of your misdirected sanity.  I would call you perfect
when it wasn’t true, and become the answer
you spent an entire existence
suffering for.

You owe me this, sugartongue; the sweet silence
of your teeth. [this story is like a million others
rejected before it, glorifying earthbound angels:

please]rewrite the world for me.
I love you

Lou is bugged and shot up with drugs, he sweats this bird he hardly knows
All that he wants is to see someone he respects without their clothes
So like some hybrid mother slash lover she’d soothe and heal his wounds;
Kiss those dying ears so softly that the reaper stops to swoon




i sure write a lot of romance poetry lately, all things considered
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AdrianMinotaur Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Every time I read your poetry I just melt, woes and worries dissolve (at least for one brief moment), and I can just put myself into the moment of imagination given wings by your magnificent poetry.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh that makes my heart gush in ways human organs physically aren't supposed to :love:
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oracle-of-nonsense Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Student Writer
This is gorgeous
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I adore your work, that means the world to me, thank you :heart:
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing and brilliant.

I think it's writing like this that reminds me why ~oracle-of-nonsense and I wrote our poem about kissing another poet.  Poets seem to be the only ones who understand the totality of romance.

Our poem: fav.me/d3g5s1a

This is just wonderful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that poem's absolutely lovely :heart: and thank you so much, I know what you mean. We do have the unique ability to articulate the unimaginable.
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's funny, isn't it?  It almost makes you wonder how non-poets articulate romance in their minds, eh?

(and thanks for the fave)
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Student Writer
sugartounge.

That sticks in my head the most for some reason. 

Great stuff, but the last line has a square bracket in between "please" and "rewrite".
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much! and yes, I'm aware, I added that to finish the bracket I'd started in the stanza prior to it.
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This was very beautiful, starting from the title and all the way till the last line! I loved this! :D

  romance poetry rules  ;)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for the support! :heart:
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure! :D
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
quite some beauty here.

love is a lot of loyalty and I think you expressed that part of it very well.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome ^^
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lwoodnj Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
I have a corresponding poem somewhere...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahaha that's awesome :heart:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013   Writer
Wow. :wow:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013   Writer
You are most welcome. :heart:
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow that's so pretty. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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MelodieRox Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome. :)
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student Writer
Your second stanza is so beautiful it could stand alone as one piece of poetry, love love love
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh thank you so much :heart:
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Jesus fucking Christ, Maddie. This is fucking beautiful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: it's an honor to know you think so
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CynicalSyndrome Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student Photographer
The third stanza is very arresting. The sudden demand and the almost slang-like "sugartongue" contrasts so sharply with the glorifying that happens in the first two stanza that it feels like a total redefinition. Your speaker becomes a real person instead of a two-dimensional love-longer. Well done.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's my whole goal summed up into a few sentences (: thank you so much! :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student Writer
That is beautiful, I love how you describe everything.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome =)
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
You know, this is one of those times you where you read soething that makes you want to weep and be cheerful at the same time.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
Well thank you for the wonderful feeling I got when reading this:)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
stahp

writing

so

fucking

beautifully

Seriously, this one hurts to read, it's that gorgeous. And deep. Like the bloody Mariana Trench.

I can't write romance poetry because I am a forever alone awkward cat lady who's never been kissed or hit on by a guy (or woman for that matter) so I stick to writing crappy fanfictions /sob
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhhhh stop being so sweet :heart:

trust me, I relate more than you know :iconkittenplz:
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LadyBlueHawke Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
These words are strung together so perfectly. This is so deep people could drown in it!!!!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
what a kind metaphor :love: thank you!
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Bark Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Professional Writer
I wish that I could write with such delicate poise!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh thank you so much :love:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Your writing is nothing short of ethereal and I'm quite jealous. Keep doing what you do <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
don't be jealous <3 you're lovely
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
ditto what ~PrideofPanem said. 
u so lovely. so very very lovely.
gimme some of you specialness plz? :heart:
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voltairemarx Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my God.
That Was , AMAZING
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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