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the tears
I rationed have all
run out. Tuesday comes
up behind me and steals
my breath; my cat snores.
she can’t sleep soundly
since she lost her seventh
life. I’m like that, I’m always
worried someone will try to steal
what I’ve already given away.
I miss color. newsprint sobs
washed me out. I am a
blank canvas, I am a faceless,
I am one
of you. I wake up sweating
and it’s winter and I can’t
sleep because my memories
follow me between my sheets;
jake still won’t listen.
we never knew we were the
lucky ones, we scarred, too. don’t
touch me. don’t want
me, don’t bare my bones
when you think I’m not
watching. I’m afraid of
myself. breathing loud
enough that others know
I exist; you follow me,
open-hearted, bleeding,
needing, laughing, it’s
a game. who has lost
the most, we all want
to win; I’m so tired, so scared,
there’s no one in the world
who sees me. I can’t cry.
we’re in a drought.
UNFILTERED GOD SaVE ME

this is probably more honest than I should be. I'm already aware of the mistakes in punctuation, I wanted it to sound like how I felt it.

if you have questions, ask. it's all true.
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
I think this one is very personal...  it almost feels like by reading this im intruding into your mind where everything is bare and vulnerable and I absolutely love writing that does that! Gosh! Your little pieces get better as I read on!
One day, I want to be able to capture emotion the same way you do in this piece here!
Favourite line would have to be...
my cat snores. 
she can’t sleep soundly
since she lost her seventh
life.

Tragic, Beautiful, Perfect
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can feel so much raw emotion from this, and I love it, and it's beautiful. Thanks for sharing. :hug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
your thoughts blend effortlessly with the slice of life snippets. this is a thoughtful, poignant poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing how you use snippets from your feelings to build an escalating sense of foreboding. And of course the ending is quite the kicker <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Perfling Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student General Artist
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<33333
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VengefulFawn11 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The only reason I find this confusing is because it makes so much sense, even if it looks a bit all over at first glance. I don't know why it does - perhaps it is that the words guide themselves. 
The mixing and blending of everything makes for a very beautiful and powerful poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
i think i needed to get it out for myself, haha, just to make sense of why i can't sleep anymore

(all the fragments of this poem were written in the wee hours of the morning)
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themeepynerd Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, the drought in California has ended.

I don't understand it word for word, but as a whole, I feel it. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student Writer
It's confusing, it's in a muddle, and yet it's also extremely linear, like a pause between the lines that's a hesitation to reveal how you feel which is just really a human attribute. :tighthug: You have no idea how well I feel like I can relate...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Writer
:glomp:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student General Artist
The formatting is confusing....
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm sorry you think so
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Karinta Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Student General Artist
:iconsorryplz:
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014
Evaded questions asked by fear bore wisdom when words knew only to hide.
(Water flows into shadow and wells walk a path not easy to survive.)

I have a gift that I do not know how to give.

It will not matter.
(The rain will fall.)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
as always, your words bring me great comfort :heart:
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Hang in there, butterfingers.
(Do not be afraid.  Angels have wings, remember?)
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
rules are just suggestions
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
my trip on the wild side was short-lived
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
wild was made
for words
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herbodyismycoffin Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
this is so wonderful. gorgeous wording, and i love the stilted feel to it. you are very talented (: every word kept me waiting, wanting to know. wonderful work.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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herbodyismycoffin Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2014   Writer
you're welcome!
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