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the tears
I rationed have all
run out. Tuesday comes
up behind me and steals
my breath; my cat snores.
she can’t sleep soundly
since she lost her seventh
life. I’m like that, I’m always
worried someone will try to steal
what I’ve already given away.
I miss color. newsprint sobs
washed me out. I am a
blank canvas, I am a faceless,
I am one
of you. I wake up sweating
and it’s winter and I can’t
sleep because my memories
follow me between my sheets;
jake still won’t listen.
we never knew we were the
lucky ones, we scarred, too. don’t
touch me. don’t want
me, don’t bare my bones
when you think I’m not
watching. I’m afraid of
myself. breathing loud
enough that others know
I exist; you follow me,
open-hearted, bleeding,
needing, laughing, it’s
a game. who has lost
the most, we all want
to win; I’m so tired, so scared,
there’s no one in the world
who sees me. I can’t cry.
we’re in a drought.
UNFILTERED GOD SaVE ME

this is probably more honest than I should be. I'm already aware of the mistakes in punctuation, I wanted it to sound like how I felt it.

if you have questions, ask. it's all true.
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Wanderlings Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can feel so much raw emotion from this, and I love it, and it's beautiful. Thanks for sharing. :hug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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muscularteeth Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
your thoughts blend effortlessly with the slice of life snippets. this is a thoughtful, poignant poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing how you use snippets from your feelings to build an escalating sense of foreboding. And of course the ending is quite the kicker <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Perfling Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student General Artist
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<33333
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VengefulFawn11 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
The only reason I find this confusing is because it makes so much sense, even if it looks a bit all over at first glance. I don't know why it does - perhaps it is that the words guide themselves. 
The mixing and blending of everything makes for a very beautiful and powerful poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
i think i needed to get it out for myself, haha, just to make sense of why i can't sleep anymore

(all the fragments of this poem were written in the wee hours of the morning)
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