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it happened before
we did.  it was more a person
than you or I or that boy
in the park trying
to convince us to
become something
stupid.  it happened

before your smile
cracked the sky in half, before
our laughters slurred into
a dissonant song, before
your fingers traced the stories
lying on my face before I knew
just how many pieces of sunshine
were trapped in your hair before
the walls became the ceiling and
I wasn’t claustrophobic.

 things I remember:
   the red blur of your room like
   God was experimenting with the
   symbolism in abstract art, the
   tri-tone shimmering of your eyes
   like the surface of the water, the way
   you defined perfection as a scale of
   women ending with a less than sensible
   me, the way you always moved like
   you were dancing and no one was there to
   
watch.
love of mine, someday you will die
but i'll be close behind, i'll follow you into the dark
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014   Writer
"things I remember:
   the red blur of your room like
   God was experimenting with the
   symbolism in abstract art"

i have a friend, who comes over every few months,
and plays that song on my guitar and he sings. and we sing. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i love you and i love your words and just seeing you in my inbox makes my day a million times brighter
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014   Writer
lady, i say the same about you :heart: 
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MattVoscinar Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
So, your enjambment RULES.

Also:

"the red blur of your room like
   God was experimenting with the
   symbolism in abstract art," 

If I hadn't commented with "Holy wow." on a previous piece of yours I read, I'd apply it here. I haven't been lurking enough of Deviantart and just got back into your gallery. I am SO happy I did. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
yayyyy i've totally been trying to master it

and thank you :love: i'm quite infatuated with that line.
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poetry-is-life-aloud Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this has a killer flow to it !
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Student Writer
1) love that song
2) love this poem
3) love EVERYTHING about you :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're the sweetest :love:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Student Writer
:D I'm just sweet enough ;p
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