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Words, words, words... by Kublakhan27

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Literature by SomethingOnceSacred

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October 17, 2012
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there's something about those little broken
dreamer girls with misproportionate promises
and lingering whispers,
who walk like angels, lost, and trying
to find a way back home;
whose hearts bleed abnormally loud
and resonant- those girls with
shadows like ghosts [dead and haunting],
that make them a flavor
to taint your tongue.

if you listen close, you can hear the
unraveling words that once knit the hollow space
between their bones,
you can hear their shallow sighs like
sun sets for a final time.
you can hear their ticking time bomb lungs

and you can touch their secrets, because they
wear them on their skin. not like wounds,
more like sun kisses or wispy tattoos
ingrained into who they are; you won't know
what they mean until you connect the dots
and find answers in their questioning stares.

they'd like to remain something unknown, because
they've identified the world as a disease- vile and
insidious, with the capability of sinking
underneath your flesh and changing who you are.

these girls wince like lambs, aware of
wolves at their haunches; they hide
from open sky because they remember the day
it all came tumbling down.
they steal away, for some better purpose yet to be
understood or even explained.

there's something about them- their
moony eyes and mistrusting hands, their withdrawn
ideals that reflect their wilting nature;
those girls whose thoughts tremble when given a voice,
and who have built their foundation
upon a faulty philosophy of wishes

that makes them shine like heaven;
beckoning and enrapturing, more dazzling than
even their dreams had dared
[brilliantly, brightly, right before they
blow out]
catch a falling star, put it in your pocket
never let it fade away.

(So, you guys wanted more poems about me.)

I really recommend reading this aloud, if you have the opportunity.
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DreamB1g Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow.. this is breathtaking. Your words are very powerful. I'm captivated and amazed. Great job girl!
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my, thank you so much! :love:
DreamB1g Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome hun. :)
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
Haanyaan Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
no problem :) :hug:
OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Student Writer
I loved reading this aloud. And then letting all of those nicely stitched words bounce around my head. Excellent poem--absolutely gorgeous.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very happy when my words can sound pretty, too. Thank you so much, any compliment from you means a lot to me :heart:
OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!
Ad-Kins Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012
Do you like the band Queen Adreena?
Something tell me that you would like them. The lyrics anyways.
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