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ENGLISH LANGUAGE by lombregrise

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you were an untouched sunset,
never before seen and familiar
at the same time; delicately shedding
shades of pink the same color
of your starving voice

and I was most beautiful
with my clothes off, too much skin
intersected by too many lines (never
the near parallel you longed for)
a hazy blur that made the nights
our own watercolor cliche


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you were that cheap love song
that never sounded authentic,
lyrics stitched through your
paper skin; chords resonating
from your every wanting sigh

and you were surprised how much
you needed me, from the concrete solidity
of my ribs to the metaphoric indecency
of my thoughts, naked and trembling
for your callused ears (or maybe
it was just me, justifying the way
you skinned my anxious layers
with your ravenous hands,
like underfed beasts)


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you were the child crying
at shadows pretending to be monsters,
running from the prospect of
god and death and gravity;

& you were the letter I never sent

"I'm done apologizing for
the person I wasn't before
I was me"
titles are really difficult lately
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fox-ninja97 Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Student Writer
The rhythm, how the words tangle with the emotion of it, is really fantastic.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
it seems you've found the perfect title, brilliant work as always, maddie darling :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
you're most welcome, dove! :tighthug:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you were the child crying
at shadows pretending to be monsters,
running from the prospect of
god and death and gravity;


Yes :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure :heart:
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PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
HRNGH

I MISSED YOUR WRITING
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I MISSED YOU GOOD THING YOU CAME BACK
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