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you were an untouched sunset,
never before seen and familiar
at the same time; delicately shedding
shades of pink the same color
of your starving voice

and I was most beautiful
with my clothes off, too much skin
intersected by too many lines (never
the near parallel you longed for)
a hazy blur that made the nights
our own watercolor cliche


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you were that cheap love song
that never sounded authentic,
lyrics stitched through your
paper skin; chords resonating
from your every wanting sigh

and you were surprised how much
you needed me, from the concrete solidity
of my ribs to the metaphoric indecency
of my thoughts, naked and trembling
for your callused ears (or maybe
it was just me, justifying the way
you skinned my anxious layers
with your ravenous hands,
like underfed beasts)


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you were the child crying
at shadows pretending to be monsters,
running from the prospect of
god and death and gravity;

& you were the letter I never sent

"I'm done apologizing for
the person I wasn't before
I was me"
titles are really difficult lately
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fox-ninja97 Jul 11, 2013  Student Writer
The rhythm, how the words tangle with the emotion of it, is really fantastic.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
thank you so much <3
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Sammur-amat Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
it seems you've found the perfect title, brilliant work as always, maddie darling :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
thank you! :huggle:
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Sammur-amat Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
you're most welcome, dove! :tighthug:
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FuzzyHoser Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you were the child crying
at shadows pretending to be monsters,
running from the prospect of
god and death and gravity;


Yes :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
thank you :heart:
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:iconfuzzyhoser:
FuzzyHoser Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure :heart:
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PrussianPersephone Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
HRNGH

I MISSED YOUR WRITING
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
I MISSED YOU GOOD THING YOU CAME BACK
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