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it’s not like they said it would be easy.

when you look at me
open-mouthed and dewey-eyed,
negligent; and your laughter
slurs together like runoff sewage,
and your voice is drowning in
a certain kind of sadness, the one
reserved for the faults
we never asked for; and you sigh,
heavy, like I am back sitting in
your throat between your adam’s apple
and the truths you dare not speak;

you pity me.

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it’s that very same weakness which
delivered me naked and trembling
into the skin of a person
I never was; pity

does not require action, disappointment
does not take away from the burning human need
to overcome oneself. I’m sick of living
tomorrow regretting the person I am today;
I drained her all out in a fit of desperation,
and filled myself through with vodka giggles
and scribbled lines and you, darling, you,

who fears nothing but the skeleton girl
sleeping quietly in your closet.
hello, personal

i have a book sitting on my floor, "Transformation Soup"

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Ravel22 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013
I understand everything about this work.You may not believe me but my life is so similar now that I can feel this work.Thanx
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Ravel22 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2013
so very welcome!
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   General Artist
congratulations on the DLD, dearling :huggle: <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :love:
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somethingsophie Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   Writer
drained her all out in a fit of desperation, 
and filled myself through with vodka giggles 
and scribbled lines and you, darling, you

^ favorite lines, but all of this is profound.  wonderful job and congratulations.  <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you!
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wordeea Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
congrats ! beautiful, well deserved
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! >3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omG WHAT IS WRONG WITH MY HEART
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Professional Writer
congrats on your dldl :iconepicclapplz:
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thank you! :iconkermityayplz:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Professional Writer
:)
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Congrats on your DLD! :heart: :winner:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013   Writer
Congratulations on your DLD! :clap:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   Writer
You're very welcome, dear! :D
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:love: you guys are wonderful!
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think the inside of your head is something a lot like heaven and is certainly a visual, of oft' tragic, haven. What a mind and what a way with words.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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DogmaticKerr Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, Miss Maddie :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
really nice flow and some strong, easily felt emotions. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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vividlyprosaic Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013
Awesome!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! <3
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Flaming-Freebird Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
Excellent work. "does not take away from the burning human need to overcome oneself. I'm sick of living tomorrow regretting the person I am today" was, for me, particularly poignant. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! <3
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Writer
brilliant
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3a
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013
" pity

does not require action, disappointment
does not take away from the burning human need
to overcome oneself. I’m sick of living
tomorrow regretting the person I am today;
I drained her all out in a fit of desperation,
and filled myself through with vodka giggles "

...afggffdfsdGASFdg. This is just brilliant. Every line, every pregnant word is packed with raw emotion, and sucker punch me in the gut like I had learned nothing from the previous. This is real and achingly beautiful. Maddie at her best.. just wow. This will be on of those I come back to read time and time again, because it just gets better with every visit. Wonderfully done.
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salkdjsalf thank you so much. i'm really rough on this piece because of how close i am to it so the fact you even like it at all just makes me feel so wonderful <3 thank you
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student Writer
:tighthug:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This made me ache on the inside. :heart: :huggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i know that feeling haha :heart: thank you
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greenleo94 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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vergilusphoenix Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The first one I could very much relate to :p as 'him'.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
interesting, thank you <3
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and you sigh,
heavy, like I am back sitting in
your throat between your adam’s apple
and the truths you dare not speak;

you pity me.

damn, i love that.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautifully, beautifully done. Phenomenal job. :clap:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are so lovely :huggle: thank you
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, nah. Just supporting my fellow writer. :aww:
And my pleasure, your works are amazing. :)
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Perfling Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student General Artist
like I am back sitting in
your throat between your adam’s apple
and the truths you dare not speak;

I’m sick of living
tomorrow regretting the person I am today;
I drained her all out in a fit of desperation,

I have no words...
Especially that second one. Speaks way too close to home.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much <3
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Perfling Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Student General Artist
:cling: No, thank you.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013   Writer
I usually roll my eyes at poetry that have roman numerals (especially the ones I've written, aha), but you wrote this very well. Sometimes personal poetry can be the best kind.
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