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and this is where we bury our hearts,
between self-defeating personality disorders
and burnt bridges and midnight ramblings
we promise ourselves aren’t true;
embedding our memories in forsaken homes
like it is a conscious decision to shed
our wings (reptiles don’t fly)

and maybe I am the monster of every
myth: wide-eyed and jagged toothed and
looking to regain a piece of myself the
world borrowed, many moons ago

as I falter and stumble over my own unaware
feet, wreaking havoc, reeking of self-acquittal--

all I ever wanted to do was belong.

dreams are flaws much like the hearts we
flaunt on our sleeves, and I seem to
have lent all mine away; I am

something entirely ignorant, in the dark,
believing fingers fumbling can find answers.
they never told me reflections are backwards
and the world spins the wrong way and
hurricanes are really an embodiment
of all our own withdrawals:

but one day, these walls will crumble,
and I will learn to breathe in dust.
(goose bumps)


I had writer's block. So the first thing I did was go and read ~featherback's work :meow: this is a tribute to her. She is simply one of the loveliest people alive.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is a rather interesting work. Since It has been... well long since I commented on your works and knowing that you don't like critiques - I would say that I did understand the general feel of the poem and I like it. The ending was the most well writen part.

Over all a fine poem. keep writing.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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CantSitStill Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this was beautiful :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Student Writer
Still catching up on everything in my inbox BUT CONGRATULATIONS MADDIE :heart::heart::heart: Goose bumps indeed. I particularly love the second stanza and the last four lines. Chills everywheeeere.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
THANK YOU
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kori-hibana Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Student General Artist
simply lovely~ :3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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naomiphantomhive1 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Student General Artist
OH.................WOW.......
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