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breezes are fickle things, you said
when your eyes were somewhere far away

the wind danced in the narrow expanse
of all our waning hopes and desires,
and something about the way the air grew static
made me remember a time when
inexperience was still a virtue.


sparks go out, you said
as the discord dimmed
(glossy eyes weren't always
made of glass, but they became
along the line of desperation)

I truly believed the world pulsed somewhere
in the cadence of your voice,
because in your breath- earthquakes would
break and oceans would crash and I always
came up short.


we're living a borrowed life, you said
but no one ever taught us how
to save up time

don't try to tell me
pain is pertinent to
everyday living
I couldn't
hear my own words, either


forget me, you said
I am only evanescent
   I am beautiful, forget me
       let me
    fly

you didn't earn those wings
from saving any souls,
you just wanted a better way
to discard the day.


fading away used to be
something beautiful
“Soon passing out of sight, memory, or existence; quickly fading or disappearing.”
Evanescent is a pretty word. (an ugly state of mind)
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
"and something about the way the air grew static
made me remember a time when
inexperience was still a virtue."

damn. this hit me hard.. the loss of innocence is quickly forgotten.. a brilliant poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart: I'm honored you felt that way
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
everything about this is so... wise. it's a weird word to describe it but this poem makes me think that you must know the meaning of everything. also i lovelove this:

I truly believed the world pulsed somewhere
in the cadence of your voice


:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm absolutely honored you think so! :heart: Thank you for the comment.
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Featured [link]
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are so wonderful!! :heart: I greatly look forward to reading the other featured work (:
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Shannon-Sweeney Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) :heart:
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dagoth-jeff Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Depressing... written from a pained heart?
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I actually wrote it purely off the inspiration from the word "evanescent" and then saw how closely it related to me, personally.
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dagoth-jeff Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it was very clever.
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