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June 9, 2013
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The Last Time I saw you,
you were down in the dirt,
[literally] on hands and knees,
looking for the bit of magic
your father had promised was toiling
just underneath the surface.

You feel it, you whispered in
a cotton hush like the vibrancy
of your voice would intimidate the
dreams you scraped at beneath the
faultlines. Daddy never told a lie
[excluding the usual good things
come to those who wait, and 'tis better
to have loved and lost, and every end
is a new beginning]. You feel it,
you whispered, trembling at the hands
the same way you did for the Pills
that couldn't quite fix the Problem.


I never really understood all the ways
you crumbled. Ours was only
a simple appreciation, the kind
you see in dog-eared romance novels
and time-old photographs but never
real living people. And The Night

you swore to me you loved everyone
in the world, imperfections and
jaded natures and judging eyes and all,
for the simple fact they were alive,
I called you crazy. You said
they were impossible examples of
what happens when fate and fortune
and other untouchable things come together.
I told you no, things are sometimes just
what they are and you asked, then how
could I ever love me?

I didn't question it when you woke
up crying, asking who could
catch the pieces of falling stars


You are a little child, hiding
under the bed with your monsters
because you realize fear is merely
a concept and reality is the only thing
that ties you to consciousness, like a firm hand
pressing your head underwater until
you forget what it is to breathe.

You are a dreamergirl, singly
defined, stars stapled in and on
your brittle bones, wishes staining
your breath like some expired alcohol;

lives originating and dying
in your universe eyes. The Last Time
I saw you, you said I just need you
to believe in me before turning and

running away.
this is really hugely experimental based off poets (who have waaay different styles than me) that I admire and if you read all that up there thank you and I'm sorry if it was ramblyawful, I may just delete it later
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww i love this soooo much its so beautiful <33
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :heart:
KittykatMWuster Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
absolutely absolutely beautiful. Amazing. Intricately and delicately made. It's like a piece of glass. I don't know what I'm saying. Absolutely absolutely beautiful.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ugh thank you so much you're the loveliest thing <3
PrussianPersephone Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
If you delete this then I will be severely upset.
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I won't! :heart:
PastMisfortunes Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Noooo, don't delete it! I'm going to critique it ASAP.
nikikt Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please, please keep this up! ERMAHGERD, it has me in this perpetual state of deep thought that i just cant shake that your poetry always put me in. and i love it. I just don't know how to ever describe what I'm feeling here. This really is amazing, please keep this up!
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're such a sweetheart, thank you for your support! I will certainly keep trying
flummo Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Student Writer
ramblybeautiful. :heart:
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