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she goes to sleep
clawing at her chest with pinpoint accuracy
for an emptiness she can’t describe,
but hates all the same. tomorrow

she will write a letter: “dear boy,
i always wanted to be somebody’s
flowery poem, but the verses carved in my arms
are riddled with ugly clichés. & you are why

i don’t sleep through the night. if
we were a language, i was the
subordinating conjunction, you were

the punctuation.

i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye”
ellipsis
1570, from L. ellipsis, from Gk. elleipsis "a falling short, defect, ellipse," from elleipein "to fall short, leave out," from en- "in" + leipein "to leave"


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Perfling Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student General Artist
I still love this first stanza so much.
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye


this :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
ALL THEES LOVELY LINES IN DA WORLD ARE YOURS :iconlainloveplz:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're the loveliest :tighthug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
NONO THAT IZ BEING YOU WHO SPARKLEZ IN ALL DA HEARTS :tighthug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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vespera Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"for an emptiness she can’t describe,
but hates all the same." god yes
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
as always, your poetry leaves me breathless.

if
we were a language, i was the
subordinating conjunction, you were

the punctuation.


I liked that bit the best, though.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh thank you so much :heart:
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thepoetboy Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i absolutely love the last stanza, especially the word staccato just stands out.

but this is so beautiful:

i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye

i love the image of staccato conclusions, excellent work darling!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're the sweetest, thank you so much :heart:
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
I love love love this. It speaks for how I've felt these past weeks. Thank you
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm honored :heart: thank you
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013   Writer
i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye


oh man:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're lovely :heart:
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student Writer
your piece has been featured here --> [link]
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read the journal for more details.

:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're wonderful :heart:
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Student Writer
and you as well! :heart:
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
I've fallen in love with this poem!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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SirLorcan Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
You're very welcome!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the final stanza.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you, that was my favorite
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Professional Writer
Your wonderful poem has been featured here: [link]
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i cannot wait to read all of these, thank you so much :heart:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Student Writer
WHAT PRUSSIANPERSEPHONE SAID.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THANKYOU
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013  Student Writer
WELCOME! :love:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please come to my house and write poems all over my redone room.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i will take this as an invitation :heart:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Someday/Sometimes I just want to plaster the walls with poetry...
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Perfling Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Agreed!!
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