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she goes to sleep
clawing at her chest with pinpoint accuracy
for an emptiness she can’t describe,
but hates all the same. tomorrow

she will write a letter: “dear boy,
i always wanted to be somebody’s
flowery poem, but the verses carved in my arms
are riddled with ugly clichés. & you are why

i don’t sleep through the night. if
we were a language, i was the
subordinating conjunction, you were

the punctuation.

i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye”
ellipsis
1570, from L. ellipsis, from Gk. elleipsis "a falling short, defect, ellipse," from elleipein "to fall short, leave out," from en- "in" + leipein "to leave"


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:iconperfling:
Perfling Dec 1, 2013  Student General Artist
I still love this first stanza so much.
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i remember you in staccato
conclusions, solemn absences
of goodbye


this :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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:iconforestmeetwildfire:
forestmeetwildfire Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome! :heart:
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Sammur-amat Jul 11, 2013   General Artist
ALL THEES LOVELY LINES IN DA WORLD ARE YOURS :iconlainloveplz:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
you're the loveliest :tighthug:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Jul 24, 2013   General Artist
NONO THAT IZ BEING YOU WHO SPARKLEZ IN ALL DA HEARTS :tighthug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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vespera Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"for an emptiness she can’t describe,
but hates all the same." god yes
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
as always, your poetry leaves me breathless.

if
we were a language, i was the
subordinating conjunction, you were

the punctuation.


I liked that bit the best, though.
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