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two weeks until the end of the world,
and i’m busy stockpiling all my regrets,
writing letters to flaws i don’t care
to fix, and trying to learn to draw
infinity. it’s time for two truths and a lie:

1. i was drunk for an hour on
good vibes and loneliness and
that quote “from the moment we
are born we begin to die”

2. and god, Bianca, you still show up
in my dreams; glaze-eyed and
more vocal than you ever were
when you were half-alive

1. (how close i came to arctic happiness
when you froze in my mind,
snowflake breath lingering like
the soundtrack of my breakdown)

now, she tells me she is sick
of the clothes stretched tight like
a second skin, and the gaping silences
between her ribs, and the singsong
unimportance glazing over her
hollywood-hangover eyes. she blossoms

like an earthquake, finally
growing into the goosebumps
and hollow bones her father
gave her-- i want to cure the world,
use a freeze ray to halt time
and kiss every empty wound;

i'm becoming poison, and i’m sorry
my neglected hallucinations
share the floor where i sleep.
dear madalyn, they don’t make

medications to give you a purpose.
all alone, you were digging graves
in stardust and writing epitaphs
in the blood of your own self-inflicted
paranoia. now, the schoolchildren pick

dandelions for your recovery, and
their mothers weep as they see their own
offspring reflected in your eyes.
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know this comes from a place of deep pain...it's beautiful, and reading it makes me ache.

You are beautiful. I hope you know that. :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Student Writer
shivers. (this is how behind I am with my inbox :stare:)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahha don't even worry about it <3
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Bahahaha....no ma'am, I do not like that word. *goes a little spastic* BUT you didn't use it in a gross ridiculous way so I forgive you and I'm gonna grin about this. ONLY BECAUSE YOU'RE MADDIE.

Moving on. This is a prime example of why I watch you. This poem. Honest. Honest. Honest. And my goodness, I love honesty even when it's not the prettiest tellings.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:dummy: I hoped that would be the case!

and gosh :blush: you're way too kind to me, thank you so much 
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Kindness and honesty are two different things, my dear. (:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
(how close i came to arctic happiness
when you froze in my mind,
snowflake breath lingering like
the soundtrack of my breakdown)

-flails ineloquently-
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
but aren't all flailings eloquent, in their own right
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
I hope so, because that's what I tend to do when I adore something but I lack the words to describe why. ^^;
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Holy crap, I love this, especially the last stanza.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :love:
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
2. gives me shivers and the last two stanzas are just
I can't describe it but they're so potent. Sometimes briefly mentioning names in a poem sort of alienates the reader (at least in my opinion) because we don't know who these people are, but here- it makes it so personal, so up-close and powerful and
/end coherency
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'd never thought about how names might isolate a reader, but I'm so glad to hear it worked the way I'd intended. Thank you so much <3
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't know if other people ever feel that's true, it's just something that *often* throws me off. xd But you do it so well, of course. <3
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HollowSunsets Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
This is beautiful. ;_;
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No words, just love. For you and for the poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student Writer
:tighthug: You are beautiful like a broken heart that's just found somewhere safe to heal and try again, like the silver linings on dark clouds and the ray of hope casting a shadow in a dark place reminding people there's still light somewhere.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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Loveislightblue Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"two weeks until the end of the world,
and i’m busy stockpiling all my regrets"

That was enough to get me off hiatus long enough to say that this is a wonderful piece of work. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahhh <3 thank you
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Loveislightblue Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure, you majestic being. =P
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013
I must say, I feel so conflicted in adoring your poetry right now. I do very much adore it as poetry, but it is hard to read because it feels like I can breathe all the hurt that billows out of it.

You are exceptional; know that.  And I hope that writing gives you a scrap of release. :huggle:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's certainly cathartic. and it makes me really really... well, happy wouldn't be the right word, but proud that i can create something out of all the feelings i don't know how to make sense of. thank you <3
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
You should be proud. It is a productive outlet and you exhale so beautifully. :heart:
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randomphilosopher Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WHAT. NO. It is not terrible. It was even more amazing on the second readthrough than the first. If this poem were a drink I'd savor it for an hour. "Dear madalyn, they don't make/medications to give you a purpose."

I can relate to this so much.

I love "hollywood-hangover eyes."

It's filled with a kind of desperation, but strangely hopeful for the subject matter. At the same time it shows, almost the lethargy of procrastinating over something as important as life. I-I just can't describe how this is wonderful.

But it is. So much so.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh god i love how you described everything. i want to thank you for really understanding what i was saying <33 sometimes i don't understand myself, haha. you're lovely, thank you!
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randomphilosopher Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:blushes: I'm glad I didn't take too many liberties in trying to understand, then! Thank you so much for sharing you work.
And you're welcome.
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v-espertine Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
you are the most of lovely
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you'd know <3
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh, but its lovely, like everything else you do :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're precious :heart:
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hgfdsasdfgh Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Student General Artist
C: so are you
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