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I was violet-cheeked and
diamond-hearted; a work
of art in reverse,
tearing between my ribs
and calling it beautiful,

and I wonder now why they
never taught me this in school;
the sepia-saturated glow life
gives out some point after
you’ve realized wishes are
for those who’ve not yet
woken more alone than when
they went to sleep,

they never taught me all
the reasons why or that
sin tastes sweet. I met

my maker once in a backalley
bar, stormy eyes and peppermint
breath, charming off a hangover;
he sighed, “I know how many
days it’ll take you to give up
completely. I know how many
dreams you’ve sold away and
how many lies you need to
swallow before you can fall asleep.

I know that you’ve never quite
grown up and I know that
you’re afraid of me” he
smiled silent and downed
another drink, losing himself
in the ramblings of a solipsistic
existence where “I” am finally all
that matters (and sometimes

I believe I was built hollow
like the porcelain dolls I grew up
wanting to be. cold to the touch,
perfectly fake, shattered

when my little brother wanted to see
how high she could fall;
the scars in the wood were
her only memory, my mother
grumbled at the scratches and
waxed them all away) on nights

such as these I like to pry
myself open, in hopes that the
butterflies nestled inside my ribs
will spread their dusty wings,
and they will call it beautiful

when I gray out, colors staining
the pavement like some rebellious
attempt at leaving a mark,
my calling card,

a poet come full circle.
I am not what I am
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:iconriseandbe:
RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Man, you get me. Gorgeous!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love: thank you so much!
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:iconriseandbe:
RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course!
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:iconflummo:
flummo Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Student Writer
A stunning declaration. :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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neonsquiggle Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aaaaaah, breathtaking.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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tiajones Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
feeling like a shattered china doll is never a lovely feeling,
but once again,
you have written it well.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm honored to hear that :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the middle chunk is where it starts shining for me. quite a gem in there.

nice to read your work again.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome ^^
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I met

my maker once in a backalley
bar, stormy eyes and peppermint
breath, charming off a hangover;
he sighed, “I know how many
days it’ll take you to give up
completely.


My goodness....:heart::faint:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahh you're so sweet :heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
"I met

my maker once in a backalley
bar, stormy eyes and peppermint
breath, charming off a hangover;
he sighed, “I know how many
days it’ll take you to give up
completely. I know how many
dreams you’ve sold away and
how many lies you need to
swallow before you can fall asleep"

ZOMG. I'm in awe. wonderfully, wonderfully written. I really enjoy the..humanity of your "maker" it makes for a very interesting concept, and you've described that concept beautifully. A fave.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart: i really believe we make our gods out to be the best and worst parts of ourselves
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
I'll disagree,but it is certianly an interesting idea.
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your poetry is gorgeous. Even not recognising your lit tag I was drawn to it instantly :heart:
You are such an amazing writer!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: goodness, thank you so much!
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:iconmadameshadowenn:
madameshadowenn Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D
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IntraSect Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
People will see you as they need you.
(You are not an exception.)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Why are you so perfect?
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
gahhh stop it with all the kindness, I can't take it :tighthug:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will spam you with kindness if I want dammit. You deserve now.

Now accept my undying love.

:heart: :rose: :heart: :rose: :heart: :rose:
:heart: :rose: :heart: :rose: :heart: :rose:
:heart: :rose: :heart: :rose: :heart: :rose:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ashdghkahsdfgfjs it's too much :faint:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
And yet you are what you are. An unequal beauty with unique thoughts to be laid out on blank pages for the enjoyment of all, you are wonderful and different and I love you =)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are so sweet :huggle:
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:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle: Only if you're sweet to me too ;p
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
I've been avoiding poetry in general lately since I feel guilty that it has been so long since my last poem....... But after reading this, I now remember what it means to write poetry again.... It isn't simply a means of using fancy words and rhymes to feign wisdom or experience in life. However, I have never truly thought that. But I remember now, it is a way of freeing the soul and the mind, strained from the weight of stress or life itself. It allows a poet to let it out in a beautiful form despite the sadness it may or may not contain. A poem isn't just read, it should be felt. The reader should feel as if they have just seen into a part of your soul or mind that crys out for the needed recognition of others. It is not always sad, it varies greatly. Much like the different souls and minds of different people.......... Thank you for allowing me to read such a meaningful work of art such as this. :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad to hear feel that way, I hope you are able to write more soon!
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snowjoe72 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
I guess I'll have to wait for inspiration.
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IglooSam Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Impressive. I love the dark tinged philosophy of how poets are really never complete until they have laid out all the beautiful they have inside for others to see.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And I adore your interpretation. Thank you
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IglooSam Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
It was my pleasure.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You really have that distinct style that glows, you know that? Not everyone can pull that off and still be a beautiful poetic at the same time, and you're the first! :D

:love: :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: I'm touched to hear that, thank you!
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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palaeochannel6 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Dug <3
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart::heart::heart:
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HeyThereDelilah20 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
if i could, i would fav this over.and over.and over again. absolutely beautiful!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm honored to hear that! :heart: Thank you!
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