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you will love a woman
who uses the word
gossamer
too often. she will
diagnose dead artists' descents
into madness and laugh
too loudly at jokes
no one understands.
she will braid crowns of
flowers, she will write poems
in constellations, she will
try to walk like a dancer so
no one can hear her
leave. she will be
an ice sculpture, and when
she cries, you'll convince yourself
she's melting, she loves you, you've
changed her, you've
changed; she will wear you
like a comma, like
an incomplete thought,
like
a
pause
in her story, and
she will leave you wondering
what
you
did
wrong.
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, the last part:

she will wear you
like a comma, like
an incomplete thought, 
like

pause
in her story, and 
she will leave you wondering
what 
you 
did 
wrong.

Absolutely incredible! :love:
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015  Student Writer
she will wear you
like a comma, like
an incomplete thought, 
like

pause
in her story


Ohmygosh. This is amazing. These lines, for me, held the most impact. I love the way you've set this out, and how it flows. I was just kinda sifting through some DA literature and hit this. Im honestly intrigued and amazed by this, think i'll keep reading through your gallery :D 
Anywhoo;
Carry On :3
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Chipchinka Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014   Writer
Yep!
You're the reason people like poetry.  Just sayin'.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
awww :blush: thank you
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:iconchipchinka:
Chipchinka Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014   Writer
You are most welcome!  I've been away from deviantArt for a long time and coming back and reading your stuff is a real treat.
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014   General Artist
UGGH :tightug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank youuuu :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014   General Artist
always, sweetheart
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RiseandbeStronger Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Breath-taking! I love it from beginning to end. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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RiseandbeStronger Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
like

pause
in her story, and 
she will leave you wondering
what 
you 
did 
wrong.
:heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love the change of pace at the end, it really sets you up for those last four words. Also this image:

" she will be
an ice sculpture, and when
she cries, you'll convince yourself
she's melting,"

Knotted my throat a little bit.... Well maybe a lot,  it's just really a beautiful piece.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you're so sweet <3 thank you
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
Wonderfully done.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
I've always enjoyed the way you use breaks. This ain't an exception. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sweet tea <3
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Bluezbreakr Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
Can u fcking not
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M-Gray-M Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The words are beautiful and the way you formatted them is beautiful. I really, really love this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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ButterflyTorn Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
"she will leave you wondering
what
you
did
wrong."

Could not be more perfect.
The only line I had trouble finding a place for in this masterful web is "diagnose dead artists' descents/ into madness" and yet it brings a certain concreteness to the persona of this woman. As in, not just any one, but this one.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i really appreciate that, thank you
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Perfling Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student General Artist
she will wear you
like a comma 

love that
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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calvincooledge Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Huggle! 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
I assure you: you are quite impossible to ignore, especially when you write like this.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
you take my words away :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Simply gorgeous. :heart:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
a style i normally hate but... this is pretty
why is it that the best poems are usually prefaced with "ignore me" or something like that
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
because when i write passive aggressive things i feel bad, haha
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ghostinafog Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014
don't; it's beautiful 
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Serendiipitii Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This just took my breathe and thoughts away ..
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Writer
I can't, you've drawn me into your world of words and I never want to escape.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Student Writer
:heart:
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student General Artist
This is truly lovely...although it worries me that I originally connected more with the woman described.
she will wear you
like a comma, like
an incomplete thought

beautiful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Of course.
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sasori-the-dreamer Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014
Beautiful
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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SycamoreSea Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can't ignore you. If you want me to ignore you you have to stop writing things that are beautiful and right and make me pause my music to read them aloud to an empty apartment and a sleeping cat because they are that beautiful. 
...don't stop writing things that are like that. 
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