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for doubt, in the silence between
religious guilt and stolen
body heat. I am made of helium.
in my dreams they
                               pop me and
watch me flutter. I wonder if everyone
else’s head is so congested as mine,
hyperactive with inattentive people.
  you are never serious--
he stares at me in a different
set of eyes; there are words
I cannot say,   there are
things I cannot tell you.
                     (twice a week
                  I watch the people I love
        leave me for good.
there are
     spiders in my throat,
                                           I have
                   tunnel vision and
    I sold my dreams
for antidepressants and
           apathy. I’m
      terrified     of        being
                                                  nameless.   why
are you back why are you here
under my skin why does the water
still bite me why can’t I scream when I dream
     of dying?)


              I’m trying to make
         myself content with the idea
      everyday is an understatement
    of the one that came before it.
I am not serious because it has a one hundred percent mortality rate

but the weather you guys
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kissysaltcoatedangel Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your writing is always achingly beautiful. And sometimes if I am lucky I can see sentences that seemed to come from my quiet life such as "I sold my dreams for antidepressants and apathy." I think I've fainted. 

Hopefully though they will come back...
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MattVoscinar Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Writer
I am stealing this for signatures in the future:

"I’m trying to make
         myself content with the idea
      everyday is an understatement
    of the one that came before it."
 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
please do :love:
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner May 7, 2014
Every time I come back to this to finally add a comment, I'm blown away again. I dont know what to say. Heart-achingly beautiful, haunting. Wonderful poetry. Thank you. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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karmacursed Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Last stanza of this is killer. Good work.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much <3
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
First off, I adore that title, it is a wonderful title for an absolutely wonderful poem.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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calvincooledge Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
You've improved, this poem is better then first one that you wrote in this style( i believe  it was "with love"). it's still got the same style(duh) but it still flows like fluid/ doesn't feel forced. Can't wait to see the next one. 

:D (Big Grin) 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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liveartaslifeart Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
o_o.. Sorry but *Shakes head* What 

I understood your poem, but the description

What

and then "but the weather"
LOL wha- ... t...
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
poetry is the only place I take myself seriously
everywhere else I just joke around
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liveartaslifeart Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
Ikr, same here
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
buy them back.

dreams are worth much more than numbness.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a highly educated team of doctors is paid to disagree with you
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nawkaman Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
I suppose I shouldn't speak to situations I don't know enough about, but I just wish it could be a different trade off.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i really do too
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