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with Sunday-heavy lips, she calls me
selfish and means it. I remember

dreams better than people, strangers
greeting me in the grocery store over
a common past and sorry selection

of red grapes. I remember Katie
being beautiful and happy and
wearing the same abnormal toe shoes
and being a few decades older than time
would allow, I remember Emily
being alive. I remember me

escaping to France to defy logic
and stow away in a pretentious,
overpriced tourist resort where
I’d learn to speak a language
I’d never use and love people
who’d never know me; I remember

impossible things.

she tells me trust is not a virtue.
responsibility is gained and
taken away when you prove

unable to learn to be normal and
defiant at trying to breathe. she says,
I love you, but I don’t understand,
and she cries, saucer-eyed,

and this time I can’t
wake up.
i know i keep making all these obscure references but lately i'm using poetry like a journal because i really can't remember anything and i'm trying so hard to tell all these people's stories because i feel like i've let them down if i let them fade along with me

in other news, i keep having terrible waking dreams
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry about the terrible dreams. :heart: I hope that's gotten better by now.

This is just amazing. As is everything you write. I mean that. :hug:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014  Student Writer
got me in the gut
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hate you for being able to write like this dammit
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yesss feel the hate
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may-flower-smile Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013
beautiful.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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v-espertine Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
perfect love
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no you :heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
I love the imagery. The specificity and ambiguity, juxtaposed, creates for a lovely effect also. 
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
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91816119 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
"she says,
I love you, but I don’t understand,
and she cries, saucer-eyed,

and this time I can’t
wake up." 

That's like how I feel about the whole world - I've been falling in love with it my whole life but the more I try to understand it the more confused I get. DUDE.

Or am I parsing that line wrong? Is it the speaker who doesn't understand or the "she" ( "I love you," but I don't understand or "I love you, but I don't understand").

ANYWAY it is a beautiful poem. I think poetry at its best is a vessel that allows us to take a personal experience out of ourselves and give it to other people, to strangers - which is pretty insane that we are able to do anything like that at all and you're doing it very well and THANKS for being one of the people who lets me have a life that bigger than my own.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow, I hadn't even thought about the two ways that line could be read. In this specific instance I meant that "she" didn't understand. I love the other way you read it, though. I feel that way a lot, too-- like I love the world but every time I try and think through it I jumble it all up in my head.

your comments are always spectacular <3 thank you for reading and caring
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ExistenceWeSummonYou Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
Yeah, exactly! It's a jumble. Though I bet if I ever woke up and was like "oh I get it! This whole existence thing totally makes sense now", then I'd get super bored and sad real quick. Confusion and uncertainty can be comforting in a weird way; they make room for hope and optimism. <3
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
Do not concern yourself with dreams that are only dreams.
You will know the ones that should not be. 

(A dead give-away is that they are usually followed by a headache like your skull being filled with magma.)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ahha but lately that's a side effect of my way of living, too
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IntraSect Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
You would know the difference.
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Student Writer
:tighthug: Obscure they may be, but you yourself are not, like the boundary where the mist begins, you're standing as a silhouette about to step into a light.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
sometimes using poetry like a journal is the best way to write. it adds a realness to pieces that can sometimes feel too...unbelievable.

and being a few decades older than time
would allow

--I think I like this bit the most. it always seems to be the old souls who die young or maybe, who's hopes die young.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sometimes it works but other times I worry my writing sounds like an inside joke for only a handful of people to understand.

and it seems that's always the case, thank you <3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, yeah I know what you mean. I think you still manage to say things that people can take away with them.


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Summonaconjurer Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013
your style of writing is beautiful dude! so fluent, which makes it easy to read, and succinct but still FULL of detail =D great poetry
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yay so glad to hear it <3 thank you
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