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I’m
trapped back in time like
a sinner on something sweet;
don’t ask me to move on

(hey,
kaleidoscope eyes never knew left
from right. I’m different, I’m different;
bleeding white and crying black and
flying out in a storm with paper wings)

I fell in love with a broken idol--
bruised throat and splintered fingers,
the most beautiful shade of purple
to ever fade out. He never knew
my name,

maybe I’m dumb.
maybe I forgot the way the world spins backwards
and that happy endings only come from fairytales
rewritten so that children can fall asleep.

in all my years I never quite learned
how to disappear completely,
this sickly escapism justified by the
promise of all my missing pieces:

a runaway’s prayer on shooting stars,
oh, please just take me
away
"A casual stroll through the lunatic asylum shows that faith does not prove anything."
(sort of relevant maybe)
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:iconriseandbe:
RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"maybe I forgot the way the world spins backwards
and that happy endings only come from fairytales
rewritten so that children can fall asleep."

and
 
"a runaway’s prayer on shooting stars,
oh, please just take me
away"

:heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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ThyPoetSorcerer Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
" I’m different; bleeding white and crying black and
flying out in a storm with paper wings". :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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doublethefun Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
I really loved this piece. Just everything about it. Great work
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :heart:
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karmacursed Featured By Owner May 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very nice. I like the metaphors and the imagery in it. :clap:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the third stanza...it has a nice rhythm to it
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
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vellusz Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked all but one line. That line was: "maybe I’m dumb." seems better shown than told.

Though: "kaleidoscope eyes never knew left // from right." and "a runaway’s prayer on shooting stars" are really nice.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I see what you mean. I tried to use it to change up the flow. (to be honest, I'm also listening to a lot of Nirvana lately, and that lyric has been running through my head) Thank you for the feedback!
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MozartsNemesis Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
"bruised throat and splintered fingers,
the most beautiful shade of purple
to ever fade out. "

Just..yes. Beautifully macabre. also, the ending is straight brilliant.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's so lovely to read your comments again! Thank you :heart:
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this! So many great wordings, especially this:
"kaleidoscope eyes never knew left
from right"

It's vague enough to be open to interpretation and structured enough to have sense and motion. Very interesting atmosphere overall. Well done!
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad to hear it worked well :love: thank you!
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PaperbackRevelations Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"in all my years I never quite learned
how to disappear completely,
this sickly escapism justified by the
promise of all my missing pieces:"

sTOP SEEING INTO MY SOUL.

But seriously...I know all-too-well how that feels.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
SORRY YOUR SOUL IS JUST SO PRETTY

thank youuu :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no it's not it's ugly and full of shit
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
That feeling of wanting to disappear... :love:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome =)
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X12-1992 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very good
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Perfling Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student General Artist
If I were to paste my favorite lines here, it'd pretty much be the entire thing :)
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: oh gosh, you are far too kind
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voltairemarx Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) poifect
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you
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voltairemarx Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) You're so very welcome
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